I So sorry 2020 has been pretty barren. But lately I have wanted to go to an idea I had a while ago!! I had decided to tackle a one shot where I rewrite parts of an episode to be better. This time it is Ojamajo Doremi Episode 32! This one is a great episode and made me love Momko as much as I do but I feel certain elements could be done better namely the ending! So why not attack it head on as a blonde American Japanese girl once said and redo the ending my way. Enjoy!!
(Doremi POV)
"Momo Chan!" I Yelled but it was too late. She ran out in tears. She had caused something bad to happen to Hana Chan due to giving her extra pudding causing a stomach ache. Still the way Aiko Yelled was rather rude. She seemed to feel that way to. "Was I to harsh with her?" Aiko Asked unsure. "I.. think you were but I understand. We love Hana Chan but I also feel we made screw ups with Hana Chan to. Remember how you lost track of her when Leon Kun made fun of your accent. And even look at me and what happened to Hana Chan when I was called a bad mom. We've all had moments were we weren't the best for her..so I think we should give her a second chance..let me talk to her." I told them as they nodded as I ran out hoping she was okay.
"I'm a failure, I'm a bad mom.." Momko Said as I found her around the pond under a rain shelter. "Momo Chan." I Said as she turned around looking sad and really down. "Doremi chan please hear me out. I didn't hurt her, I swear. I didn't wanna hurt her I wanna be a good mom to her I swe.." she started as I slapped her. She looked stunned and was quiet as I looked at her. "Momo Chan..I need to tell you a story..it will help you understand." I told her.
We sat down as I opened my mouth gazing up at the sky. "So you know I was originally made her mother when she was born from the Rose right." I told her as she nodded. "Well when I was raising her I was the best mother. One day when I was taking her out for a walk I found a friend..more or less who was having romantic problems with a guy who she was dating. I wanted to help and I kinda used magic to get them in a romantic situation and it worked! However once I found Hana Chan she was sick from being out too long. I felt awful, horrible and then the fighting began. Majo Rika and Popu laid into me about how bad I was as a mother. How the other girls were better and it hurt me even when Hazuki and Aiko were defending me. I was so scared and sad and confused that I ran. I ran from the shop all the way to my mother. I told her everything and she gave me the two most important pieces of advice when raising Hana Chan. The first was that at that time she was in pain not me so I needed to help her and be there for her and not be having a pity party for myself. The other thing was that you don't become a mother by having a child you have one in the process of raising the child. In that case I was given advice on how to help and I stayed their by her side the whole night using all I learned to help her and no matter what from that day on id put Hana above all other things in my life..even if they hurt doing it." I told her as she spoke up. "That's why you slapped me." Momko Said as I nodded. "Yes because you needed to hear it from me. Momoko Chan I think you'll be a great mother to Hana. I know how much you were excited to help her and how much you worked for it. Onpu Chan told me. But the main thing you need to know is you can't give up..giving up on her is the worst thing ever." I told her as she stood up her tears dried. "Your right doremi chan I must go back..I must be by her side!" She Said as I smiled. "Oh and doremi.." Momoko Said as she hugged me. "Thank you..I'm glad you talked to me." She told me as I smiled. "No problem now go help her." I told her as she nodded and rushed off.
Tomorrow Morning
"Oh wow she's sleeping like a baby." Hazuki commented. "Yes and they look so sweet together." Onpu Said as we came up to Hana baby area to find her and Momko sleeping with her as Hana's pillow more or less. "Guess what you talked to her about at work." Aiko told me as I smiled. "Of course after all I'm Hana's mother so I know what's best all the time." I Said as the others gave me a sigh. "But Momo Chan we'll be as good as all of us in no time. I can feel it." I thought about watching the cute scene.
The End!!
So yeah I loved doing this. In the same vein as fixing the data squad ending I feel what I did here keeps the same spirit as the original but fixes some issues. The main issues I had with the episode were the fact of how no one seemed sympathetic for Momoko, the fact that no one's past mistake were even brought up, and the fact that it was Onpu who was the one to help Momko despite Doremi having a very similar thing happen to her. So with this story I actually had Doremi being sympathetic to her, I had Aiko and Doremi's issues with Hana being brought up and I got to have Doremi impart similar lessons into Momoko that her mother did to her. Also a side note this gives her and Doremi a moment together that could be used in the flashback as I always hated how they never had a one on one talk with each other besides the beginning which was the best or less good compared to the moments with Hazuki and her on the beach, or her and Onpu with the recording of we can do anything, or even her and Aiko when she insults everyone. So this gives them something to bound over. Anyway hope you enjoyed!!