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Alright, this is a departure from the usual course, but I felt that it needed to be said. Here is an update on the current state of the story, TLDR: I re-wrote the whole first act, a re-read would be wise as MUCH has changed.

Long Story Short:

What started as re-writes to improve readability of the earlier chapters, evolved into what eventually became a total re-write of the first 5 chapters with an additional 6th chapter added to it.

What does this mean:

Essentially, the entire first arc of the story went into the trash, and I salvaged about 10% of the text, it is entirely fresh content with new events and characters. Some characters that appeared along with entire events-lines were dropped or substituted with reworked variants of themselves, in favor of something I think is more cohesive structurally (Not saying its the BEST but I think its an improvement, at least)

Why the re-writes happened:

To be frank, I felt I needed to change up the events as some folks noticed that this earlier section was essentially a Warhammer short story that eventually ended up in Gensokyo.

But at the same time, I didn't want to turn this whole thing into a Touhou wank, nor a Warhammer one. I wanted to blend the two as best as I could and provide a unique story with an insane premise that was entertaining an entertaining read.

Though, I don't think the original story provided that. Foley was as dynamic as cardboard in the mind and his squad-mates lacked any real depth or characterization beyond their archetypes, not to mention the ABJECT lack of Touhou related content in the first act of a story about a crossover!

So, with that I re-wrote Foley's team, nothing was left unchanged and with a particular character addition, I hope that it at least will be able to give a unique perspective and angle to inspect the Imperium through, that isn't really able to be covered with a purely Imperial-focused unit.

Your rambling, give me the final word here you goddamn writing hack.

Alright, so basically I do want some feedback on this new re-write, as I want to really knock it out of the park. Continue to bombard me with reviews and corrections, so I can use that to fine-tune my writing to reach the goal of making a more entertaining story for you folks!

Also, if folks REALLY did like the older story more, I would be happy to toss it up on a side page for posterity. I didn't think highly of it, but I won't deny someone the right to read whatever it is that they enjoy.

That is all, I go back to drafting angry commissar man and his misadventures part 4. Stay tuned!

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