I have re read my work and i know you are probably annoyed with my revisions but it is just really hard to write when you are not happy with what you wrote before. I have decided to completely COMPLETELY overhaul this story. I wont take this version down in case some people actually like my rushed plot. If you go to my profile you will see a new story called Jettobasugan Overhaul. The first chapter has many small detail changes and needs to be re read in order to understand the events after it. I hope you all are not to pissed and I really hope you read the new one. Im only starting chapter four but I am really proud of what I've written so far.