BEFORE I BEGIN I WOULD JUST LIKE TO SAY THIS WILL OFFEND QUITE A FEW OF YOU. THIS IS ME SARCASTICALLY, COMMENTING ON YOUR REVIEWS. STAY TO THE END FOR A SPECIAL ANNOUNCEMENT.
CheyenneDaMelonLord chapter 14 . Mar 12, 2015
Awwwwwwww yay finally a acessa or tace moment yay for the new couple
ITS TACE
CheyenneDaMelonLord chapter 15 . Mar 18, 2015
I red this and started screaming like a craze fan girl on crack when she reads something really cute and fuffly
DON'T DO DRUGS
IvolunteerAStributeHEYwhyNOT chapter 16 . Mar 19, 2015
AAAAAAAAWWWWWWWWWWWW!
I'm totally shipping TACE! I love Leo! I love everything! Sparky and Catfish its the new Seaweed Brain and Wise Girl! They are sooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooooo cute!
I can't wait till you post more! please do it fast!
NO THEY ARE NOT, "the new Seaweed Brain and Wise Girl," THAT WOULD BE NICK AND SILENA ARE. YES TACE MAY HAVE THE CUTENESS COVERED, BUT SICK HAS THE EXPERIENCE.
HPpercabethLOTR chapter 27 . May 20, 2015
Hi, this story is so amazing please keep writing it. It has made my day
YOUR COMMENT MADE MY DAY
HaywireEagle chapter 2 . May 21, 2015
Well, its kind of flat and lacking to be honest. Little detail to really paint a picture or give us any insight to the characters that you've provided.
Plenty of errors and broken sentences scattered about.
"In an hour we were camp." for example.
I'M TRYING MY HARDEST HERE IF I WANTED SOMEONE TO CRTIZISE MY WRITING I WOULD, BUT I DONT. DON'T BE THAT GUY THAT POINTS OUT THE MISTAKE IMAGINE HOW IT WOULD FEEL.
HaywireEagle chapter 3 . May 21, 2015
By the way. The child of a demigod is called a legacy.
BY THE WAY. NO. THE CHILD OF A ROMAN DEMIGODS IS CALLED A LEGACY. I WANT TO KNOW WHERE EXTACLY IT SAID A CHILD OF A GREEK DEMIGOD IS CALLED A LEGACY. BESIDE IN MY NEXT BOOK YOU'LL SEE THEY'RE CALLED LEGENDS.
Guest chapter 27 . May 21, 2015
Needs more nick and annabeth bonding I think
NO IT DOES NOT
ThePrintingPress chapter 26 . May 27, 2015
Put all your ANs are the bottom, putting them in the reading makes it quite cluttered.
(A/N I AM SO VERY SORRY FOR YOU)
SomeoneKnew chapter 2 . Jun 2, 2015
OMIGOD i totally forgot the stolls, I think they didn't get nearly enough attention.
WAIT
SomeoneKnew chapter 4 . Jun 2, 2015
Well, duh she's Percy's, i mean who else would it be?
NO IT'S SOME HOBO'S NAMED BOB
SomeoneKnew chapter 6 . Jun 2, 2015
That's Percy isn't it?
REALLY NOW + TESSA IS NOT AN OBJECT
SomeoneKnew chapter 7 . Jun 2, 2015
I 3 Twins!
NOOO! REALLY?
SomeoneKnew chapter 8 . Jun 2, 2015
That's... a lot of kids.
DUDE ITS ONLY THREE
LucyTheAlligator chapter 26 . Jun 1, 2015
Hmmmm. Okay, ima fir names at you, READY.? Get you're helmet on! Nick - Four ( IF U DONT GET THE DIVERGENT REFERENCE I WILL TAKE AWAY YOUR BLUE COOKIES FOR A MONTH! :) )Jasper - Shiny. Tessa - Owl brain. Ace - Piney. Selena - Wars ( heh heh.. Ares Wars get it HUEHUEHUE ) Rebeca - Bex. Ava - ( Can she die?... )
WHAT?... AND NOT AVA CANNOT DIE
Sup chapter 3 . Jun 2, 2015
Remember: Thalia can't have kids, shes a huntress.
REMEMBER: THIS IS A FANFICTION WHERE ANYTHING CAN HAPPEN, AND SHE LEFT THE HUNTERS
StellaTheReviewer chapter 4 . Jun 4, 2015
Uh, are you a native english speaker? If you're not, I completely understand your mistakes, but if english is your first language, I suggest you proofread your chapters. You made many random mistakes, like 'could of' instead of could have. I'm not trying to be mean, just please proofread.
StellaTheReviewer chapter 5 . Jun 4, 2015
Umm... In the teams Poseidon and Zeus weren't in either. You could make the transitions more fluid by adding punctuations, or just adding more details.
UH, ARE YOU A NATIVE REVIEWER? IF YOU'RE NOT I COMPLETELY UNDERSTAND YOUR MISTAKES... MY STORY IS PERFECT.
Cinderlight chapter 29 . Jun 13, 2015
Jackson... Her last name is JACKSON... Because Chase had her wedding right? If not Chase. THEYNEEDTHEIRWEDDDDINNGGGGNOWWWWPLZZZ. Btw, I love the combo in this book, the way it's set out and everything about it :). You are da best writer, you should read warriors (a series ) by Erin Hunter. You could make a fanfic about them den :D The chapter was a bit short, it was interesting though.
WELL SHE IS CONFUSED. YOU WOULD BE TOO.
Mothing Importan chapter 29 . Jun 24, 2015
I love your plot, I really do - But honestly? Your writing needs work. Serious work.
SO DOES YOUR FACE. LIKE COME ON YOU COULDN'T EVEN SPELL NOTHING IMPORTANT CORECTLY
Guest chapter 30 . Jul 17, 2015
NOOOOOOO DONT LEAVE MEEEEEEEEE BTE WHEN ARE U GONNA START BLUE TOAST? Now seems like a good tiiiime
THE STORY WAS NOT EVEN OVER. AND I GO TO SCHOOL. I'LL START IT WHEN I CAN AND IT WON'T BE CALLED BLUE TOAST.
Lost-In-A-New-World chapter 15 . Aug 5, 2015
It's really good and the plot idea is amazing but can you stop saying "Ya" it gets annoying
I'M NOT SAYING YA MY CHARACTERS ARE SAYING IT.
annika g chapter 30 . Aug 26, 2015
I don't find myself compelled enough to comment on many fanfics but yours is so creative and well written. I like how your characters make sense and how you portray the characters that are already in the Percy Jackson story. Thank you for a wonderful story so far.
I LIKE YOU BECAUSE II LIKE WHEN PEOPLE TELL ME HOW AMAZING I AM!
.562 chapter 30 . Aug 29, 2015
Omg...tears...
I AM WITH YOU SISTER
deviantpokemontrainerjay chapter 31 . Sep 11, 2015
Please continue! I want to see Aubrey and Zack again!
WRONG FIC
Lost-In-A-New-World chapter 5 . Sep 13, 2015
It's good but "Funnest" isn't a word. I'm not trying to criticise you or anything but really, you might need to check over your writing. Or get a beta-reader. And please stop the "ya's" Sorry, but it makes it hard for me to enjoy the story. I can't read stuff that has mistakes. It's only one more key on the keyboard to type anyway. "Ya" to "You" isn't that hard!
Otherwise, the plot's great and I love it.
IF WILLIAM SHAKESPEARE CAN MAKE UP WORDS SO CAN I. AND YOU MAY NOT BE TRYING TO CRITICISE ME, BUT LET ME TELL YOU A SECRET WHAT YOU ARE DOING IS CRITICISING ME. AND I'M NOT SAYING YA MY CHARACTERS ARE SAYING IT.
Pjofanatix chapter 21 . Nov 17, 2015
If you don't like Reyna, why don't you dis-like Calypso? She technically liked Percy too. Also, you use a lot of screaming words in this story. It gets annoying. Please change that. I don't like this story that much and I will not read it. Sorry. Thats my opinion.
REYNA IS DEAD. I DO NOT CARE FOR YOU OPINION
OGkush-OGskywalker chapter 2 . Nov 22, 2015
I'm pretty sure if she had a kid she wouldn't keep, being a demigod from her daughter; but oh well...
SHE WOULD DEFINATLY KEEP IT. HER MOM GAVE HER UP AND SHE WOULD NOT WANT TO DO THE SAME.
OGkush-OGskywalker chapter 4 . Nov 22, 2015
dialogue seems like a robot is talking, but your trying you'll get better if you keep writing p.s add more detail
REALLY I THOUGHT THE SAME WHEN YOU WERE TALKING
OGkush-OGskywalker chapter 6 . Nov 22, 2015
percy dropped his luggage and ran?
YES THAT IS WHAT THE SENTENCE SAID. DID IT NOT?
OGkush-OGskywalker chapter 7 . Nov 22, 2015
robot dialogue ftw, jk definitely not ftw
DO I SOUND LIKE I CARE?
OGkush-OGskywalker chapter 8 . Nov 22, 2015
ya the robot dialogue is getting to me I can't read this anymore, good try tho
YOUR VOICE GETS TO ME TOO. I CAN'T READ ANYMORE. "good try tho." OKAY SO I APPARENTLY TALK LIKE A ROBOT, BUT YOU CAN'T EVEN SPELL OUT THE WORDS THOUGH.
Iamdonewithfanfiction chapter 3 . Nov 25, 2015
"I know it fell into Tartarus but eeh" that kind how I feel.
DON'T WE ALL;)
Iamdonewithfanfiction chapter 16 . Nov 25, 2015
Ummmmmm ey are fourteen, not 16
CHANGED THE BEGINNING AGE TO 15 AT THE END THEY ARE 16
Iamdonewithfanfiction chapter 22 . Nov 26, 2015
Awesome! Thos couple is doing better at slowing down and all. I think that Tessa and ace went too fast.
TRUE LOVE DOES NOT WAIT
LiteratureGirl12 chapter 34 . Nov 26, 2015
This chapter was very good. I'm a HUGE supporter of Nill(Nico Will) the plot is slowly getting deeper! I can't wait to see how it unfolds. Please update soon! :D
YOU ARE AWARE NILL IS NOT THEIR SHIP NAME, RIGHT? ITS SOLANGELO.
EllaAnnieGrace chapter 3 . Jan 14
Acualy, Have you read The staff of serpis? Annabeth's magic hat is back and working in it.
TO ANSWER YOUR QUESTION YES I DID READ IT ALTHOUGH I WROTE THAT PART BEFORE IT CAME OUT
Booknerd22202 chapter 41 . Mar 23
That was great. THAT was great. THAT WAS great. THAT WAS AMAZING! (Thought I would put great again?) please please update soon! I LOVE THIS STORY! :) :D
THANK YOU I TRY MY HARDEST
fandoms. are. my. family.chapter 42 . Mar 24
omg such a cliffhanger! plz dont let nick die! let sammy or jasper die! btw nick and selena r rlly sick;)
ARE YOU CRAZY NICK WILL AND CAN NEVER DIE LITERALLY CURSE OF ACHILLES. ALSO ITS SILENA NOT SELENA.
Anonymous chapter 28 . Mar 24
I loved the chapter. Though I do have some thing to say. THE LABYRINTH WAS DESTROYED WHEN DAEDALUS DIED!
I LOVED THE CHAPTER TOO. ALTHOUGH I DO HAVE SOMETHING TO SAY. THE LABYRINTH WAS NOT DESTROYED WHEN DAEDALUS DIED! GO READ THE TRIALS OF APOLLO WHICH PROVES MY POINT. BESIDE THAT THIS IS A FANFICTION WHERE I CAN MAKE ANYTHING HAPPEN. IN THE BOOKS THE LABYRINTH WAS ALIVE, AND ALL MONSTERS CAME BACK, SO I BROUGHT THE LABYRINTH BACK. AND YOU CALL YOURSELF A PERCY JACKSON FAN.
JayBull chapter 5 . Mar 27
Hey nice job on this story EXCEPT Percy left Annabeth?! That's COMPLETELY unrealistic. SMH. Aside from that it is AWESOME!
CONTINUE READING DUDE.
Katherine. colley chapter 25 . Mar 27
You we an amazing writer great job. The feels
MY FEELINGS EXACTLY
Katherine. colley chapter 26 . Mar 27
Love all your chapters
AS DO I
Katherine. colley chapter 43 . Mar 27
Good story. Sad about Jason. When is the next one coming out
THANK YOU. NOT SAD ABOUT JASON. I DO NOT KNOW.
Booknerd22202 chapter 44 . Mar 28
YAY. EPILOGUE! They sometimes make me happy. Depends on how AMAZING they are. No pressure...(pressure. Jk) This chapter was amazing! All the chapters have been amazing and this whole story has been an amazing ride to be part of. I love it SO MUCH! Please update soon! :D
I LOVE YOUR COMMENTS
fandoms. are. my. family. chapter 44 . Mar 28
such a good ending! cant sait for the epilouge and the next book!
THANK YOU
Lilypop chapter 44 . Mar 28
OMG PLEASE DO AN EPOLIGE IT WOULD BE AWESOME
I DID. WHERE WERE YOU.
daughterofartubis chapter 1 . Apr 2
Very good so far. What happened to Percy, though?
TURN THE PAGE
daughterofartubis chapter 7 . Apr 2
I'm confused. Waht just happened? Really good, though...so happy I still have like thirty seven more chapters to read.
TURN THE PAGE
daughterofartubis chapter 12 . Apr 2
Wonderful. To make thing clearer for the readers, it may be helpful to add who says what. That may help...no flames intended.
IN A REGULAR BOOK WOULD AN AUTHOR DO THAT? NO, NO THEY WOULD NOT. (FLAMES NOT INTENDED)
daughterofartubis chapter 20 . Apr 2
Why were they apart for so long? I'm happy they're together now, though.
TURN THE PAGE
Booknerd22202 chapter 45 . Apr 15
I have one thing to say-
THAT WAS AN AMAZING EPILOGUE!
Now I have more to say-
When I first found this story, I was so excited to read it and as I read and read the chapters, I fell in love with this story. In my opinion, it's one of the best PJO/HoO stories. This story kept with the PJO/HoO theme and it worked so well together. I hope you write other stories because you are one great author. Thank you for writing this story. This is my last review for this story, for I've read and reviewed most every chapter. Thank you again.
~Booknerd
P.S. Get ready for The Trials of Apollo, The Hidden Oracle, our beloved characters are coming back. :)
YOU ARE MY FAVORITE REVEIWERS AND YOUR COMMENTS ALWAYS GOVE ME THE FEELS
Rebal Reader chapter 38 . Apr 16
What? Uhhhhh... I sort of am uncomfortable and have dem Fluffies, oh snap! Thug life
WE ALL HAVE DEM FLUFFIES, ITS LIFE.
RandomPerson chapter 45 . Apr 26
I really liked ur story. Can u plz write more? Or maybe u can't but plz try.
YES RANDOMPERSON I CAN TRY
DrakonOwl21195 chapter 46 . 23h ago
I know the labyrinth was destroyed, but you know what?
I will go and read the Trials of Apollo. Sounds really good. ;)
UGH YOU DON'T GET THE HINT. THE LABYRINTH WAS NOT DESTROYED WHEN DAEDALUS DIED! GO READ THE TRIALS OF APOLLO WHICH PROVES MY POINT. BESIDE THAT THIS IS A FANFICTION WHERE I CAN MAKE ANYTHING HAPPEN. IN THE BOOKS THE LABYRINTH WAS ALIVE, AND ALL MONSTERS CAME BACK, SO I BROUGHT THE LABYRINTH BACK. AND YOU CALL YOURSELF A PERCY JACKSON FAN.
Booknerd22202 chapter 46 . 22h ago
XD Lol I haven't read them yet but I'll take your word for it.
I WAS TRING TO HINT TO PEOPLE THAT IN THE TRIALS OF APOLLO IT PROVES THE LABYRINTH IS STILL ALIVE.
plltwpjohoofan chapter 47 . 21h ago
I still would love to know who Ace's dad is, if you could put that in the next one that would be great
HIS DAD IS DEAD.
SO THIS WAS NOT MEANT TO OFFEND ANYONE ITS JUST WANT I DO AT THE END OF A BAD DAY. THIS WAS JUST MEANT TO BE FUNNY.
ANNOUNMENT: I HAVE STARTED THE NEXT BOOK BUT IT IS GOING TO TAKE A WHILE. ALSO I AM EDITING BLUE PANCAKES, AND FIXING THE THINGS THAT THE TRIALS OF APOLLO CONTRADICTS AND THEN I AM GOING TO REPOST THAT ALTHOUGH I AM PROBABLY GOING TO DO THAT AFTER THE NEXT BOOK WHICH IS NOT GOING TO BE CALLED BLUE TOAST.
PEACE OUT.