ok im redoing this chapter cos the last version was not great

Well this is my first story and its going to be weird and you might not like it soooooo sorry. There will most likely be no Hocotions so all the characters will be pikmin unless stated otherwise.(by "leader" i mean the head pikmin)

It was a warm day in the tropical wild. Our heros Flame, the hot headed leader of the red pikmin,Hana the nice leader of the yellow pikmin and Kami, the innocent leader of the blue pikmin.

Hanas pov

it was just a normal day in the Tropical Wilds, The trees leaves were drooping in the intense heat of the sun and the native creatures were scurrying about trying to devour some stray pikmin. Yup just another average day

I longed to run to the shade and rest my body but me and my team of yellows were on pick up duty. We have to bring all the pellets and all the corpes back to the onion. Just than i heard a shout coming from a nearby hill. I orderd my pikmin to go help

We rushed over to where the sounds came from and saw three whiptongue bulborbs attacking a group of red pikmin. Flame and his reds were on hunting duty. I wanted to help but flame gets angry when we "steal kills from him" for the leader of the all pikmin he sure can be immature.

"Don't just stand there help" A red said.

I suppose we had no choice. We ran over and my friend and i threw yellows on to the bulborbs eyes. After a few minutes we finished them i noticed there was many bulborbs bodys on the ground.

"You killed all of these?" i asked in confusion. I know flame is a good fighter but there really is alot of corpes

"Of course we did"flame said "It was a bit of a challenge but anything is possible if you use bomb rocks right" he continued. The pride was radiating from him, "Have you seen Kami and HIS group anywhere? he asked

"No sorry. Should we Check?" i asked

"Yes we should" Flame answered "EVERYONE GO BRING THE BODYS TO THE THE ONION, PLUCK THE STEMS THAN RETURN TO THE ONION!" Flame shouted to the yellow and red pikmin. They grudgingly followed his orders.

Flame and I started to search for the group of blues. We decided to check near the lake as it was our best bet.

We walked down the winding path that led to the lake it was soggy and grainy as if it was just flooded, Kami was probably shooting streams of water at it to make colder. We walked out on to the beach, the sand was still warm despite it getting dark. We didn't see any blue pikmin only one

It was Kami, there he was, I almost felt bad for him, flame is going to kill him. " "kami, What are you doing?" i asked.

He swam over to the beach. "Our work was done so i sent my forces back to the onion, While i played" kami said. I know he did not meen to be an invovence.

"Kami Come here NOW!" flame bellowed. The anger in his voice was stomped over to the shallow water and started shouting at Kami. Kami looked like he was going to cry.

I walked over to them and grabbed them both by the stem and dragged them to the onion. Flame was still shouting and Kami was still entererd the onion where we were gifted with a strange sight

ok i would like to tell you that the onion is very strange in my fanfic, it now has a storage hold, it stores things such as sprays,necter and bomb rocks,all pikmin have a conection to the onion and to each other which allows for a few things that i will go into detail on later last is that pikmin dont die forever but instead their spirts get sucked into tubes inside the onion and will be reincarnated when pellets or enamys are brought to the onion

keep in mind that this is my first story Hope you liked it, pokepal

i hope you like this version better 'cos the last version got some harsh criticism. I worked really hard on this