This was an extremely good story...until Fleur decided to hit Harry hard enough to permanently mark his face. That is not something you do to someone you claim to love, no matter how mad you may be. That is straight-up abuse..

nice

How people can write such shit that harry doesn't have time to date pr have fun with anyone but he has time to play quidditch and goofing around with ron lol harry has to remain verginless but the witch opposite him has to have some experience nearly every ff is like this shit don't know what pleasure people get writing such shit because harry is a celebrity they forgot this thing he can definitely shag someone if he wants but according to writter Harry's dick will only stand for fluer but fluer 's pussy can get wet for bill and harry takes back a used thing after bill thoroughly fucked fluer I can say it is even worst than harry and Ginny canon pairing as if harry can't get a better girl that he has to settle for a slut

Great story hope to see more from you soon.

I like the fic, it's alright, but it really leans heavily on the "blaming Fleur for Harry having feelings" thing, which seems pretty bad.

That was ... really good!

I'm always pleased when an Author pays close attention to the fine details of the Mother Tongue. When the narrative doesn't get in the way of the story, you've done your job.

Harry's self-recrimination was spot-on. That's just him. The Lightning Elemental thing was kind of a shock (no pun intended) and I'd like to see you expand on that a little.

All in all, a beautiful little piece! This goes into Favorites.

Now they're going to bed
And my stomach is sick
And it's all in my head
But
She's touching his chest now
He takes off her dress now
Let me go
'Cos I just cant look it's killing me
And taking control

good story

Great story.

Loved the ending

I hate stories like that.
Harry had a lot of troubles to solve during his 5-7th years in magical world. Lol he doesn't even have opportunity to kiss or shag some girl. At the same time Fleur slept with Bill (except 7th year). But in final Harry happy to marry her? Wtf.
Do you really think that Fleur did not know that Harry was in love with her?
So in the end he should accept some feelings of woman who ignored him and slept with other few years ago? Rly?

P.S: sorry for bad English. I'm not native speaker.

Nicely written
Wedding part was kind of overkill but overall nice beautiful short story

Not even close to His Angel but it was alright. It's weird how you've even spoilt your own oneshots of Fleur with His Angel which is the best Harry/Fleur pairing in existence.

Cute. But also Fleur is retarded. It’s really hard to do H/F with a mutually interested Bill and Fleur as it means Bill is still a creep trying to bag girls straight out of high school and Fleur accepts those advances. This was a valiant effort tho.

Realky enjoyed