you're right, this is heartbreaking, and deep and so emotional
thank you for sharing

Please please please - this is too much ! - I loved it! I'm seriously in love. Lisa and Dean are my absolute favourite pairing for so many reasons and this-! You stole my breath away, you made me want to write, want to explore their relationship - the detail, the emotion, the partnership aspect of their relationship and - god I can't explain how wonderful this was to read, and reread :) Stunning, beautiful, heart wrenching ... Some of the best literature I've read in a long long time.

I’m a huge sucker for good openings; I read a ton of stories, and if I’m not hooked within the first couple sentences, I quit and move on.

Here’s why I kept reading your story:
-You provide mystery/ intrigue within the first sentence [When Lisa...in bed next to her].
-The first sentence is well structured. This...I can’t describe how important this is to me in a story. Grammar, spelling, punctuation.
-You set the voice and POV instantly; you don’t leave your readers wondering who’s talking or what they’re talking about.

The rest of the story did not disappoint as far as content or emotions, either.

On a personal note, thank you for writing a story about Lisa. I love Lisa/Dean stories, and I find that well written ones are few and far between.

Moving on…
While I really appreciate the fact that the story is from Lisa’s POV, and I understand that the story focuses on her being compassionate towards Dean, I believe that it would be much improved if Lisa had a little bit more unique character written into this story. You write Dean so clearly, making it undeniable that the man you’re writing about is Dean Winchester. This casts a shadow over Lisa quite significantly. I’m not sure if this was a choice you made, and if you wanted Lisa to simply be a lens for us to see Dean’s pain through; you do mention briefly Lisa’s struggle with school and raising a kid towards the end of the story, so I’m guessing this isn’t your intention.

You wrote one line that really, really floored me. The scene with Dean’s sweatshirt, and the little details that made it obvious that the shirt was actually Sam’s was BRILLIANT. So was Lisa’s (seeming) ignorance of that fact. Loved it.

Wonderful story. Lisa really did try to make Dean happy.

This was very well written and adorable.

i'm really really upset right now

a characterization, and i love your Lisa POV. everything about this fic feels right.

-abby/makemeavessel

Thank you so much for getting Lisa's character so spot on. This is really great. I...I really agree with you when you say that this is such a heartbreaking relationship. The two (well, technically three) of them are just so perfect, I just...gah. Anyhow, this is lovely. Fantastic job.

"10/10 would read again."-Meg Masters