Really wish this story would've turned out more like this in V. Will you be doing more chapters?

Hey how you been man it's good to see you back this is Native Guns just so you know. I have to admit it's been so long I'm gonna have to start over and reread this from the start cause I forgot a lot of the plot but I know Woozie did have a lot to do with this.

And let's just hope Luis gets his revenge the cold way as it s a dish best served cold. I finally get that now too. If you go in hot and bothered you leave hungry.

I wish Luis would have actually appeared in GTA V as well. Anyway hope all's good

Daaaamn, shit is goin down!
I really love where this story is going. Keep it up!

Good work so far

Oh damn... Sorry for your dad though, hope you can live on bro.

Damn, nice one! Looks like Xavier's spoiled personality is going to change!

It's looking alright so far...

I'm glad you do your own parodies we should keep doing that and thank you for telling me Eris was that so now I have to go back to redo my Nike Cortes parody (Those are the cholo shoes) to be Eris Juan's as in Juan's or Eris Colonel's because of Colonel Cortes in Vice City.

Also are they all still in Liberty City at this point? Why haven't they moved to San An yet?

Then again, I may have a good portion of Ballad Of A Cholo happen in LC.

The funny thing about Luis is they say his hose is small yet he still manages to get more women than any other GTA character mainly because of that club he co owns. I remember you said you didn't like TA IV did that include TBOGT as well? Sorry if i asked before i forget some hings.

Good story you have here so far. I really like all of your characters, especially the twins. I think you're doing a good job with the way you portray Franklin. The way you write him in your story is pretty much the way he is in the game. Looking forward to whatever it is you have planned for this story :)

You should know that the Aztecas real life version the 18th street gang may have started on the west coast but like MS-13 are very deep on the east coast hell they're even in most countries south of the border. Then again maybe Luis just meant because they're LS based and started out in San Andreas?

Did you like Luis as a character? I forgot why you said you didn't like Niko i thought he was pretty complex and one of the first Rock Star characters that was. Every life he took, took a little more out of him.

That's a shame Woozie got killed too. I'm going to have him in my story too and he will be affiliated with Franklin down the line.

Hey there is something I don't get while you said that you didn't understand why rock star changed up LS like they did well theuy did that to LC first with the transition to HD era and i wondered if you don't want to commit to the LS HD universe's version why are you using the GTA IV HD version? Since you give advice to me on what i should edit you may also want to ad if you need i can resend the LS HD version again it's no problem and even for an AU story it'd probably work better.

Anyway as far as what Mairisol said about eating panocha that was funny but at the same time it's more a thing of how cholas in the 90's started wearing khakis and pendeletons like the men did before that it was blouses and mini skirts but in all honestly male clothes are more suited for fighting at least the pants wise but then there a re feminine pants too. It does reflect the sexism of this society though. I hope Marisol learns later on in life not to jump to conclusions on sex orientation though all though there are some lesbians that bang but no gay men.

Anyway, Lil Ceese does need to man up more and not be a little boy if he wants to really bang for Varrio Los Aztecas. t'd be interesting to see if down the line Little Ceese and Franklin were at war with each other cause in reality it would be hard being bi racial through all of that especially when you consider the bloods and 18th street are now bitter rivals starting with the gang Franklin's lique is based on. CGF is based on the P Stone Bloods from Baldwin Village and they killed some 18th streeters and it just spread like wild fire, the beef.

Anyway looking forward to see where this goes. Nice to see Luis make an appearance too. IDK that he callls women a bitch so liberally except Grace Anceollotti but then she was a bitch.

Damn from west to east they're at war! lol. So I've already accepted that more or less this is an AU story but did you at least consider using the HD LS locations or still sticking to your guns?

I was confused who was getting called a white boy Xavier or one of the Ballas?

Also Sweet is pretty hardcore putting a shotgun up to his own nephew some might call that too far. I like that you merged the 3d and hd characters and also have OC's of your own like Genius. I never heard of that for a gangster name though.

Also while I do understand and respect Helena being the woman CJ had kids with I don't know if she ever said she loved him only Millie & Denise did. I get the farmer gun survivalist aspect but does that mean she left her farm?

Man though if Xavier's mom had been black he wouldn't have referred to her as a bitch lol then again he probably just thought it but i know black women still beat their kids. White moms not so much.

Same old Sweet treating CJ like a punk. You'd think he'd ease up on him by now.

Interested to see where this goes. Keep it up!

I LOVE A SONG ROAR

can you continue. it irritates me when a story is going on but just left alone. It's really good so I hope you finish.

like how you portray franklin. he seems like he would be well-spoken.

though i didn't like how you constantly switched PoV.