poor Junpei XD

BUSTED!

the long nosed man XD

waw... nice progress... update soon...

hello, it's been a while right? 5 month since my last review in chapter 5. i am glad you update... tough chapter i see... good progress... good job...

Overall, this story was interesting and it has a lot of potential. The title itself was really intruiging, and also the characters were spot on (but the twins had too much of a mischievious personality; which for me, is a bit meh.)

But the thing that concearns me the most is that, you only focused on the twins' actual feelings rather than the other SEES members; you just kept them baffled the whole way through. And you didn't even concearn with Elizabeth's and Theodore's thoughts on the twins' return; they were just like servants for the twins that has to absolutely follow their every command without questions.

Also, there was too much POVs, to which at some point kinda lost me and I couldn't even tell who's who even if there was a text 'Yukari's POV' at the top. There wasn't a legit setting with a lot of descriptions, which I personally was having trouble visualizing the settings in my head; since there was too much dialogue and little lit.

I'm not trying to rant here or anything, just trying to motivate you to keep on improving your writing skills a bit more. There was no sarcasm, or any other violent and negative reactions to your work that was intended. I am just making an honest review of how I felt about your work and I hope to read more of your works in the future and I also want to see how much you've improved.

uh oh... they will found out? oh oh... i hope they will find oh yeah sadly i have to stop now due other activity but i'll promise i'll be back when you update. so see you...

someone getting trouble... hahaha... nice progress...

hmm... nice development in this chapter. good job..

hmm... indeed intriguing development. hmm... i think i will countinue reading.

intriguing idea, i'll put this into my fav list...

A little heavy on the "WTF" humor there I think, but that's what gives it it's charm however. The trade-off is that the heartwarming parts are a bit poorly written in comparison. Some characters also seem OOC (I mean, Mitsuru Kirijo giggling when a stranger, no matter how familiar, offers a dance? Seriously?). But all in all, nice plot!

huehheehhee! interesting! XDD I can't wait for more!

heey i'm sooo curios about this story

where are you now? why dont you update this story :'(

So EXCITED to know what happens next! I LOVE IT! Any updates? :)