This was a good short story, I actually liked the fact that Sarah summoned Chris' spirit and apologized to him. I could see that happening after the end of the film. The bra part was funny, a little unexpected, but at least the ending didn't leave the readers with a heavy heart. I did have trouble believing that Chris genuinely loved Sarah even before she cast the spell, he was an asshole. I don't think he was capable of feeling that kind of depth and emotion, especially since he didn't even understand the 'feelings' the love spell was evoking in him. And I think instead of him confessing to "loving" her, he should have been apologizing for what he did to her. That would have made your story more powerful and the idea more effective.

Hahaha, I thought the bra part was amusing. It was a good story! :D

Oh funny stuff!So you have jokes?lol,you know I use to be like obssessed with this movie,I use to watch it two times a day for like 2 I got threw it though,but my question is how in the world did I not get bored?I guess is a question that can't be story,I always wanted more of a romance between Sarah and Chris but well we all saw the movie :(

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Well, that started off really was nice that she got to tell him how sorry she was.

But then the bra part? It was kind of unexpected humor, and it didn't really fit with the mood you created in the first part. (Although, hey, maybe you were going for a lighthearted ending.)

But overall, you did a good job. I liked it.

Okay. That was good. But maybe you shouldn't have put in the thing about the bra. I mean it doesn't make sense. You need to put in a little more detail. And maybe another chapter. Those are just suggestions. Don't take it personally. That was good though.

EARTHWORM: She cast a spell that altered free will. There are consequences to such things, which were the strange behavior Chris exhibited and the fact that Nancy KILLED him because of it. Wouldn't you have felt atleast a LITTLE guilty knowing if you didn't do something someone would still be living?

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P.S. It wasn't him doing the actions! The girls were casting very powerful spells.

I cannot belive you actually made sarah feel sorry for chris.i mean seriously -he practically killed her.