I loved it! Your writing is delightful! I cant wait for your next chapters

It's nice to finally "meet" Phel"!
Nice ch!

Lovely chapter, and the backstory of Raphael's parents was poignant and tragic.

Amazing! I really enjoyed how many different facets this chapter had. And you wrote them in such a way that I felt I was there. Great detail, again!
So glad we are getting to know Raphael with his vivid backstory.
Love it!

Very beautifully written! You have great talent in descriptive writing. I can't wait to read more!

Wow! Great chapter. I could hear the storm and feel Rory's fear you described them so well. I almost jumped when the house keeper interrupted his thoughts. :-)

Can't wait for more. Worst part of Fanfiction is having to wait for the next chapter.

Well done! You should be proud!

Beautifully written descriptive prose! I would like to know more on the backstory of Rory and Phel, and also Cate, to get more of an idea of them in context, since this is a retelling with different characters. The prologue was wonderful.

Beautiful! Great descriptions of the scenery and the characters. I love all the color and warmth you have in your style of writing.

I really like how you have taken the story of "The Little Mermaid" and are making it your own.

The line- "A faint breath of a song came into her thoughts, as it grew stronger fear gripped her heart with its cold fingers." gave me goose bumps.

Can't wait for more!
Good job, sis :-)