Ghaaa! Are you trying to kill me with second hand embarrassment?!

LOVE IT!

Omg this fanfic was perfect. It felt real and I felt with the characters. Well done!

Okay. Huh, so this was a good story but I absolutely hate the ending it was horrible like what will happen? You can't just do this! The story was so good and then you just ruined it! Why!?

I have so many conflicted emotions right now, it hurts.

OH MY GOD! I HATE YOU SO MUCH! YOU CAN'T DO THIS TO ME! I LITERALLY STARTED CRYING! I AM NOT A PERSON WHO CRYS EASILY AND YOU MADE ME BAWL LIKE A NEWBORN! I READ THE TITLE AND KNEW, BUT THEN I WAS LIKE ' nah, no way someone is that cruel.' LOOK WHO WAS WRONG; ME!

I realize that nothing can just have a happy ending anymore, to quote john green, "I always had this idea that you should never give up a happy middle in the hopes of a happy ending, because there is no such thing as a happy ending. Do you know what I mean? There is so much to lose." God how true this is

My gosh it's so fluffy :3 I love it!

No.

This was intresting that ending was unique. Very unexpected.

I feel like I ran a marathon, played Who Wants To Be a Millionaire, and won American Idol all in one swoop and the prize was a hug by a old librarian. WHY DID YOU HAVE TO END IT THIS WAY! But...if there is a sequel I would read it...

WHAT THE HECK?! MY MIND CANT HANDLE THIS

I've read this ending a couple days ago and I've sat and thought about what I should review or if I should just keep my opinion to myself. However, since this is a site full or writers and writers are always looking for feedback and ways to improve, I've decided to show you my thoughts on this ending.
I didn't like it. By making it a dream you make everything Berwald, Tino, and Peter have thought, felt or done these last few chapters not matter. There was no lasting character growth. It just felt like a cheap trick to pull so that you had an excuse to write a sequel, not a clever plot twist. I have to say, I think you jumped the shark on this one. I've read the first chapters of your sequel to this and I also hate how you characterize Desire. She's a one dimensional character just there to act like a B*tch to Berwald and cause needless conflict in the plot. She creates no sympathy in the reader. If you want to create conflict that is natural, make her a likable character. That way Berwald and the reader feel guilt for wanting Tino and him together. And confusion as to whether Berwald is doing the right thing or not. You can have so much fun with it and create some fantastic rounded characters. These of course are just my opinion. It's your story and you can take the advice or leave it. I honestly am not trying to be mean or cruel, just to give you the opportunity for some honest to god feedback that will hopefully help you grow as a writer. Please don't let this dishearten you, you do have talent but there is always room for improvement.

well you screwed around with me

;(((

And now I've been mind-f#cked. I'm not sure I like Desiré much.