Hi! So, you have some spelling mistakes here, and some sentences could have been structured in better way, but overall, it was well-written. Although I would advice you to proofread your stuff a few times over, just to make sure everything's all right. I like Alice's profanity and temper. It's nice change from the usual portrayal we get of her; mousy, submissive, a little stupid. Points for that. I would like to know who she was cursing at the start, though. You've used the prompts very well, too!

Title - 3/5
SPaG - 6/10
Flow - 10/15
Plot - 13/15
Creativity - 10/15
Use of prompts - 15/15
Charactarisation and Development - 25/25
Total: 82

DADA - E.

Great job! I love how you started it off however I would have loved to know what she was swearing at haha. The creativity was most definally brilliant in this, so great job for that! However the SPaG mistakes really messed up the flow of it for me. Other then that prompts are brilliant, and the storyline brilliant. Great job and keep writing.

Transfiguration - O

Flow - 15/30
Creativity - 25/30
Prompt - 20/20
Optional prompts - 20/20
total: 80

Herbology - E

Flow - 15/30
Creativity - 25/30
Prompt - 20/20
Optional prompts - 15/20
Total: 75