Keep going! I want to see if undertaker violates or experiments with grell !

I love morbid, I love crass, I love disgustingly beautiful and horrifically disturbing things sandwiched together. I love this story no matter that it hasn't had progress... I wonder if it's up for adoption? if not I'll mind my own business and wait for another chapter. :P

I don't know why but I thought the part where Undertaker tried to comfort Grell odly cute, until Grell tried to bite his face of. Is that strange?

My main reaction to this chapter was: "Poor little baby! "And "Eeeeeeeeew! Gross!"
And that with good reason. God, all the awful things you're putting Grell through, and it's only been four chapters! Soo far his future seem really dark.
I think you're really good at describing the sensations/happenings/feelings. You do it in a way which makes the reader drawn into your story, and which makes all the glory details, like the drowning part, and the little piece of cannibalism, VERY disturbing and realistic, and frankly, a bit nauseating.

I liked it though :)

I think i discovered a blooper, though, unless I understood something wrong. Undertaker says he caught Grell two months ago, but when he's asked how long time it has been since Grell last ate, he says three months ago. Did you mean that Grell hasn't been eating for three weeks, that there's been two months since Undertaker caught Grell in the Thames, or that since shinigami (problaby) don't need as much food as humans, Grell hadn't eaten since before one month prior to his capturing? (Do you follow me here?)

I very much look forward to your next installment, crossing my fingers Grell won't have to suffer TOO much ;)

Oooh!
The changes to this chapter was sooo exciting! It was really good. Me like :)

Please continue this story...I miss it, I LOVE the way Undertaker is so cruel towards Grell... And the way he abuses him...

And I also would like to have the 1st version of the story online...it was fantastic...I wish you would continue both, you make Undertaker look like a real badass "monster"

Oh my goodness! I can't say that I 'like' this story, but I find it gripping and extremely twisted. I look forward to the next chapter-I think. ;) I never thought I'd say this but, poor Grell. Love, love, love the Undertaker! I wouldn't put much past him though.

Read all of this please :P
Two things:
1. Youre insane and a psychopath
2. MORE PLEASE! X3

I like it, the brutality I mean. I relly ejoyed reading the part where Grell eats Undertakers flesh.
I like how the story is unfolding, even if I think it is weird that Undertaker would be so calm about someone burning down his funeral parlour.
But what I would like to read would be Undertaker making Grell be his "slave" more or less, that he uses Grell in whatever way he likes while Grell has to obey. Forcing him to kill other Death Gods or something.

I even thought in the middle of the chapter that Undertaker would rip those humans apart and that he would give Grell a new stomach, with something inside of it...something like a Shinigami GPS, so that he can be sure that Grell doesn't do anykind of shit while Taker is gone.
While Undertaker uses the bodies to make more of his dolls...and that he would continue doing something like that just for fun. Getting those people to visit him and then, cut them to bits or torture them to death.

What I also would like is that you would take the first version of the story and put it up again, I really liked that version too. Maybe something parrallel to this story to see how different a story can get even if it had the same beginning?

I miss the funeral parlour, it always seemed so confortable...The new plase seems so open and steril, atleast that's what I'm imagining.

Oh my gosh, poor Grell, he lost his belly,is he going to get a new one? It must be horrible not to have one, and Undertaker is so cruel, why can't he be less of an ass, but still it fits his persona. But I hope he will not stay that extrem for long time, he should not turn totally soft but he should be just a little bit kinder towards Grell,they are very much alike afterall. Both are homocidal maniacs who have a twisted opnion about life and death...and both have long hair...Ohhhh so long hair. Undertaker should be a little funny, Undertaker is a fun person, he likes laughing so maybe he should get a good laught from Grell?
But really I must say that the story is taking a entierly different course than the first version. Really interessting.
OuO

PS. I hope Grell didn't lose an important organ, or in that case, that Undertaker atleast can stuff him back together.

This is one of the few Fics were Undertaker actually has a REAL BADASS personality, you know. In alot of stories he always is the nice cute Seme, he never is his legendary or Rough Shinigami self, he should be cold and mean to some point, always following his goal, and not be like a little puppy searching for a super sweet romance.

That is also something that always annoyed me, he loses his...how should I put it...His charm, in many stories, I especially hate those Oc stories, not because the person who writes is a bad author, but because they make Undertaker seem like a wuzzy.
Believe me, I really liked that you made Undertaker mad enough to bed his Bizarre dolls, it fits him, and that was also something that semed realistic in regard of what he said about them on the ship.
I like that you even used them in the story, I really like them as a prof of Undertakers abilities as Grim Reaper and Violator of every logical thinking.

I have had some stories on my mind regardin who are violent and disturbing, but I couldn't bring myself to write them because I don't think anyone would want to read them...Everybody seems to be more into the stories were Undertaker is nice and gentle. So I was really surprised in a positiv way when this story came.
I really hope this story will stay as it is now, with the gore and stuff and when there i then it will atleast not start going be one of the sweet as sugar romance thingies, but be more like a strong love hate relationship. And I also wonder what will happen to Grell, I hope Undertaker will force Grell to leave the dispatch and keep him as his.

Hope you will update soon.

my first reaction, like the others it seems, was "SHIT! NO!" when the "story not found" message came up, but am glad to see this isn't gone as there aren't a lot of dark-undertaker fics out there (there should be more damn it!)
when I first read the original I thought this is actually pretty good, undertaker's nice and twisted with his rather adorable creepy self (mix in his crazy logic) throw in. and then it started to take a rather some-what predictable turn towards utXgrell, which thou I don't mind, am actually starting to get sick of reading, and I thought you've introduced us to this menacing but genius side of ut (he really is the Jigsaw in your story, and I love it!) and then you make him, kindda fall for grell - turning it in to a nother one of those "love stories" between the two. when all I wanted was for you to stick to this character that you introduced at the beginning (instead of turning his personality around to fit him with grell)
(so for AS LONDON BURNS is the only story where undertaker is dark and remains thus after running into grell, I want your story to be the second on that list of regrettably scarce list of twisted but oh-so-charming ut fics)
and now you've done this rewrite, to which I can only hope you don't make the same mistake - you've now got undertaker back to being this dark and mysterious being and you've got us guessing as to what fate lies in wait - what's he going to do to grell? is he going to kill him? work him like a slave? torture/rape/batter him? turn him into a doll? grell gets away? grell gets stripped of his powers? killed by the dispatch? joining ut in whatever ut is planning with his dolls? grell killing/catching/tricking undertaker back to the dispatch to be executed? undertaker gives grell female body parts?... so many possible endings to choose... it makes me giddy to wait for more!

also, judging from the first comment on the first chapter, I've missed chapters 8 and 9 of the original run of this! please, is there anyway I can read those lost chapters? please please!?

but keep going with this one!
and you get this a lot but , UPDATE SOON for the sake of my fingernails .

What was that pudgy object? I can't imagine any organ right now that is formed like a tube...There probably is one but still, I can't remember. But until you tell, I will asume it was something Undertaker stuffed into Grell.

Poor Grell, almost dying...AGAIN. But holy death, that felt quite intense, I felt really unconfortable when Grell started loosing more and more of his blood, don't get me wrong, I have no problem with blood and gore, but I thought about how helpless a person must be in such a situation, and I hate feeling helpless.

Luckily Undie saved him, for better or for worse.

Also Undertaker must be pissed, REALLY pissed. I would be if it was my shop. So, how will he punish Grell? And yes I will asume that he will get a punishment, a really cruel one.

I love this story, please write more, I'm already a huge fan of it.

...If I annoy you with my long reviews please tell, I hate bothering people, I really do.