I really liked the concept, but the execution is lacking. The issue primarily lies with your dialogue and character behavior. People are complicated and don't talk or confront issues directly or fluently. Though Naruto may be an exuberant character and may excuse such things. For other characters, it won't.

I would suggest studying people, their behaviors, mannerisms, and dialogue. As of this moment, the character interactions and descriptions are overly simplified, unbelievable, and irritating. I've tried reading further, but I kept hitting a brick wall.

Wish there was a sequel because this story is awesome.
As it is, there is a single question that remains unsolved for me. Is Naruto going to be Older than the other Rookie 9 by the time he gets back because of the different speeds of the universes?

I wonder, will there be guilt mongering since Naruto "died"?

Damn. The sunset of youth is inescapable.

Aww Snape XDDDD

You gotta admit Gryffindor fits him to a tee though. Then again, with developed characters it's easy to see either all or almost all houses being a fit.
Naruto in Slytherin without drastic personality changes is refreshing to read. And it does work so whythehellnot.

I believe so long as you cite what is an exact quote from source material, you should be fine.

This is quickly becoming one of my favourite HP Naruto crossovers

This was a very good story and I am looking forward to reading more. It is listed as complete so I am confused and it was written 4 years ago.

This is interesting but I have a hard time understanding why Naruto would cry because of what the girl in the picture told him.

So where is book 2? Is this going to be continued and finished or what? I also had kind of hoped Tonks would end up with Naruto.

ramen eater! POMEGRANATE! I'm dieing

man you should make some new parts to make it exciting

man i am enjoying it, if that guest wasn't even enjoying it he wouldn't have read through 6 chapters

Color me "disappointed." The story is marked complete, so I read it straight through, only to find the "end Book 1" notice.

It's been some years now and, unless I'm seriously missing something from the published story "Summaries," there's still no sign of any sequel. Rather than being "Conplete," as flagged, that sounds more like "In(de)finite Hiatus" - somewhere between Indefinite and Infinite Hiatus but just shy of formally acknowledged abandonment. Now I'm sorry I wasted any time reading this.