Reviews for Asleep |
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![]() ![]() ![]() The stupidest justification for her flight I've ever seen |
![]() ![]() Well life certainly does get in the way .Writers block is no small hurdle I quite selfishly you overcome these fearsome barriers and I will say Great story more please and a resounding ThankYou |
![]() ![]() ![]() please continue...I know you are here, TPC was finished just this year...during these crazy times, you must get time to write... if u get...please continue this wonderful story... |
![]() ![]() ![]() Are you going to continue This? It's pretty great from my perspective. |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love this story and it is very original, but i was wondering if you were going to add anymore chapters to the story or not? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting chapter, and I was surprised! |
![]() ![]() Very nice story. Waiting for the next chapters. Thank you very much. ;-) |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wonderful chapter! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Great chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() Your update rate leaves something to be desired, but then again I'm not writing it... Grammar is much better. Lots better on the continuity of tenses. Couple of minor issues... 1. "In regards of our daughter..." Should be "regards to" 2. Your first 2 paragraphs need some splitting. Each one could topically be split into 3-5 paragraphs. Right now those suffer from "wall of words" syndrome. |
![]() ![]() Marysue Hermione fic much? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Can't wait for the next chapter and is Marius' obsession with Hermione a somewhat romantic one? |
![]() ![]() ![]() This fanfic is amazing. I find they way you have captivated both Harry and Hermione to be pretty damn accurate, or near accurate, same thing, really. Anyways, the way the story is developing, I would like to say that it seems like an amazing adventure for me to read. Anyways, I wish this review could be more than just an encouraging remark, oh well. My name is 412, The Last Marauder, and I approve this message. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting chapter |
![]() ![]() ![]() Yikes! I just realized I reviewed and didn't sign in... this is my review! PS- I cant believe this story only has 73 reviews. Idk how anyone could pass this story! WOW! This story is so crazy! (In a good way, of course!) I absolutely love it! Hermione's story makes Harry's fight with Voldemort seem like child's play. This story is so put together and very well written. I love the suspense and romance. Please update soon! |