Grammar wasn't too bad, though it could've been better. Good story but I do dislike how you put so much emphasis on Korra instead of the Chief when it is the Chief's story.

Chief is a little OOC. John-117 does not yell...at least not in the games. In the games he speaks pretty much in one liners and more often than not in a monotonesk voice, with hints of emotion depending on the situation. Not sure about the books though.

This is very interesting

Calling the Avatar world earth's twin is a stretch. The atmosphere my be comparable but the continents are completely different.

This was actually very good, I liked how you mixed the avatar and The Lord of admirals. I was really surprised. Good work!

This was actually really good, I liked hownt

I literately can hear bolin's voice

Interesting take on the avatars and their possible integration into the haloverse. Having gravemind appear, and the arbiter show up made things different for sure, but one thing I want to see is how John will stop that cunt parangosky from trying to capture and dissect korra.

As well, it would be nice if the people were educated about exactly what that bitch did, as compared to Halsey, and stop the stigma against her that the stupid S-IV's seem to have.

GRAVEMIND!

Bolin owned count: 5

I know who they are talkin about, there talkin abou ONI aren't they?

Wow. This an amazing story. Looking forward to the sequel.

R.I.P Cortona.

This is it. The final battle.

I smell a showdown coming next.