Now that was a good story it’s just the way I like them short and free flowing and a bit od Hurcule bashing

This was pretty good but there was some spelling mistakes here and there that sometimes made me have to guess what word it was supposed to be, also the story seemed a little rushed and squished together. I think it would have been better if it had a few more chapters. Not many just 3 to 5 more to give some more detail and development.

First thought when I saw this was this is likely to be almost a comedy, but when the idiot is involved with the mafia you know its serious.

This was a nice story. I wish this story would continue.

now that was harsh.

Awwww so sweet

Nice, short, and pretty simple. A good Go/Vi story that went in a completely different direction of the other and it was great

J'aime.

Sharpner should die

Awesome job on this unique and cool plot change!

I didn't notice the "said problem" until you brought it up, but I also notices you have a LOT of typos.

Other than that, the story is actually good so far and I'm thoroughly enjoying it.

I just read your story and it made my day. I loved your story it's very good!

the ending was so anti-climatic

Dear Kami, what the hell is with Hercule?!

What do you mean by "Capsule Corp. herself"...? Do you mean Bulma? Do you mean the Capsule Corp. /heiress/...?

It was a solid story; as others have mentioned, it had a lot of potential, but spotty/inconsistent grammar and short chapters detracted from a quite good plot.

Overall not a bad GhVi story, I enjoyed it.