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I love it! :D

Oh god, it'll be the death of me too.

Since you were going for more movie than book I'd say you did amazingly. I could just imagine Bilbo's face throughout the story (Freeman is a beauty in the movie) and even Thorin's. Really appreciated the slight banter, and the clear improvement in their relationship is great.

Nicely done!

Are you trying to kill me? That was so cute! I liked your explanation for the stars as well! Didn't see it coming, but I was very pleasantly surprised.

You are actually one of the few writers that, in my opinion, has captured Bilbo's speech like the movie-Bilbo. As in, I could see this scene so clearly in front of me, like it could have been a cut scene or something. Great job!

(Just one thing, and it's very small and something almost every writer on here does, and possible something that only I find a little confusing sometimes, but when you make long sentences like the one I am making now (by accident by the way) and it's a lot of small descriptions after each other, it can get quite confusing. For example:

"Then his other hand snuck up, past the lapels of Bilbo's coat and under his hair, and came to rest at the side of his neck, Thorin's fingertips just barely brushing the back."

It's not even a very long sentence, but I think these kind of sentences flow a little better if you make the 'sub' sentences (I don't know the official name for these) a little shorter. So, for example:

"Then his other hand snuck up, past the lapels of Bilbo's coat, and came to rest at the side of his neck, fingertips just barely brushing the back."

It's a little less information, but the image you provide is the same. It's less of a strain to read, and thus the tension in the story is less likely to falter.

(And I'm being very hypocritical, because I know I use these kind of constructions as well as they are quite hard to avoid, but I hope you understand what I mean.)

I'm very much looking forward to more of your stories! :)
And sorry for the confusing writing of this review haha. I literally just typed out what I thought.

I like it!

Ahhhhhhhh! I love the idea, and it's SO CUTE!

Nice! Well done indeed. I enjoyed the way you wrote this, especially the moment Thorin laughed. Beautiful. More please.