i cried! nallen !

Awesome chapter!

Again with the character dialog: you got Hetty dead-on. I'm delighted with your addendums to real eps; it's as if we're seeing part of the script that the director had to cut for time, and we few get the privilege of seeing the additional footage that never made it to the DVD. My compliments to your muse!

LOVE IT THE BEST EVER

I love your writing :) This was really good.

Awesome story.

that was a perfect ep to fit into your verse!

gotta love the two of them together
and of course hetty!

Well done! I couldn't get over this episode, either!

I really enjoyed this

Great addition. I loved that episode and saw so many potential Nallen moments. Glad you decided to tackle it.

A Fan

Oh you captured that episode good! Everyone did worry about Nell but besides Eric, Callen showed more (guessed because he's team leader too but hey I can dream!). And I love that Nell trusted them all.

I love it. I think that despite my being a total fangirl and a total Nallen shipper, my favorite part of this is Hetty. You managed to capture her voice and portray her as sensitive and insightful, which I think a lot of writers don't. And this episode just begged for someone to tag it- glad you did!