I really enjoyed this story! I read from stat to finish in one night! I really like that everyone comes together to help Barnabas through his illness, it really shows that they are in fact a family working towards a common goal! And not just ripping each others throats out! Love Barnabas! Sun allergy great idea! All allergies can be dealt with after all! You don't have be a vampire to be allergic to the sun! Tow points that I must point out though One Barnabas would NEVER call Victoria Vicky and Two why not include David in this story!?

This is an amazing story you are a very talanted writer I love Barnabas myself Vampire is actually my school nickname mostly because Im pale dont get cold I look like I haven slept in forever and I wear ALOT of black clothes

God story! watch your English though. You are using the wrong for tense on occasion and leaving out words. Otherwise, you did well.

Julia will bring his fever down but you have to wonder how she is handling it as she herself has always been in love with Barnabas.

That has to be the sheriff that fired the shot. You could not kill off Barnabas, could you? Good job!

Your story is very interesting. I'm wondering how they get out of this. Will they escape? How are they going to stop this manic?

You are building the suspense nicely. I look forward to the next chapter.

Good start. Look forward to more.