Lol aw

Thank the stars they were alone... or else THAT would never happen! Haha.
Ok, besides that, I think that you did an ok job for a romance fic in sekaiichi. It's the usual onodera-takano hulabalu when you think about it but for a first timer, it's a big step to make it yaoi-ish.

Good job! Check your grammar. And no, it's not just the computer's fault it made the words "turn" to "urn" and "too" to a "to"

I just love it when Takano tortures Ritsu. Cute fic. :)

Good. Perfect. Keep going like that. I really liked it. And btw, I'm a girl too ;)

Yes, you know who I am :)
I'm sorry I wasn't able to log in, my dad's computer was too slow and I really wanted to review :D
I just want to say, WOW!
I wasn't really expecting this kind from you.
I want to congratulate you for such a job well done!
Hoping you would post more ;)
Your faithful reader, bluestring :D
Just thought this would be a nice touch and would pass as an apology for not reviewing your other story. Also, for not logging in to review this.

Yes, you know who I am :)
I'm sorry I wasn't able to log in, my dad's computer was too slow and I really wanted to review :D
I just want to say, WOW!
I wasn't really expecting this kind from you.
I want to congratulate you for such a job well done!
Hoping you would post more ;)
Your faithful reader, bluestring :D
Just thought this would be a nice touch and would pass as an apology for not reviewing you other story. Also, for not logging in to review this.

It's awesome! :D

For a first one you did pretty good. when will be the next one, longer maybe?

That was really great, Carmy! Grats on your first yaoi fic (: hope to see more! PS: Hope you don't mind if I (or me and Nadine) make a doujin about your fic.

-I pushed myself to hard awhile ago. I thought to myself as I massaged my lower back. But if I didn't urn out of his apartment… I shuddered at the thought.- Spell check please. See it? :) I laughed at all the underlying humor. Will you be continuing this?

Nice work, a short, cute fic. It really does give a feel of Ritsu's life, and ends on a sweet moment. Good work

I have to praise you. As you said it IS your first ever yaoi fanfic... :D You did great.

Really like it! You should continue it!