Please finish this story I'm am loving it Love snaps and harms together

How is you series going? I would love to become an author, but as I am only 14 it seems very unlikely. lol

Thanks,

Steph

It's 'catatonic' state, not 'cationic' (first phrase) ;)

Aw That is so cute! Please write more! This is the awesomemest story ever!

SWEET! This is so cool! I love it! :)

'Castle Matrix'?
What will be next - Hrmione runs into Morpheous and takes the Blue Pill?

I like your story! You write very well. I am anticipating the rest of this story. Thanks for writing it, and good luck in the book.

u should let draco be tha love ov her life dere same age it fits bettuh and more issues can bring about to others.. snape is hexa uglee haha

Great story, I hope to see you updating it soon!

Well, I don't know quite what to say. I don't want to flame you or anything, but I think it was a good idea to give up this story. There is little merit in the story line, incuding the plot and characterization. There really is no possibility that this could be true- Hermione's morals have been made clear over and over. Her loyalty could not be an act because it is so constant.

You need to work on your writing style as well. You have many very annoying punctuation, grammar, and spelling errors. You need to get a beta,

Last, I think that SS/HG romance has to be approached delicately. I am a die hard fan of the pairing, and this isn't an honestly good attempt at it. Read Riley's 'Pawn to Queen' or Domina's 'Round Midnight'- both of which can be found at .org. It will help your writing.

You have potential. Just make sure that your writing shows your talent.

~EQ~

i luv this. it's soo great! i know your working on a book and all but you should really update this! )

Please write more. The story was just getting interesting. Just wondering but, is Hermione in her "costum" form or in her real form? Write more. Don't make me throw frozen goldfish at you.

The Draven Cats

I still think your story is really interesting. I found that this chapter (7) was sort of confusing. I know that she was having trouble finding who she was, but why did she all of a sudden start having THIS much of a problem? Just wondering. Also, why didn't Severus take her to the infirmary? And why, when she was having so much trouble finding who she was and while she was in agony because of her mother calling, did Snape throw her out? I know that he was upset about the emotions that flaired up between them, but it seems that he was very understanding to her plight. I don't see him doing that. Maybe it makes a little more sense in the next chapter. I just wanted to review what I read up until now. I hope I didn't annoy you with all of my questions!

The Draven Cats

I love this story so far. It is very different from any Hermione story I have ever read. I am very eager to read the next chapter, only having paused because of the three lines that say review on the bottom of chapter 2. I can't wait to see where this story goes

~The Draven Cats

Hey, that doesn't bother me in the least bit. I think you made Hermione too out of character and the story seems to go nowhere. I hope the book you're working on is better than this. GothicTemptress, there was no need for an apology; you were right. Perhaps before you begin writing this book of yours you should improve a bit on writing decent plots?