Constructive criticism?
How?
THIS IS AWSOME!

Aweeee! Sooo cute! I think it was great for a one-shot. I ink that if you ou wanted to expand on this would be to create this into a chapter story going into detail about things and start from the beginning of the flashbacks

Idk but that's if you wish but I really enjoyed the one shot !

Really well written, a lot like Julia Golding.

This is an awesome one-shot! I do feel bad for Omar though, where's HIS happy ending?

Wonderful! :D

This is... Beautiful! Love it love it love it! Barely anybody writes CQ fics... I'm glad people are starting to break that trend. :)

Ximena: I think it would be all right if you used some of my ideas, as long as you give credit to my story.

Hi there, i just read your fanfiction and i think that got a lot of potential for large fanfictions. Can i use yor ideas here and make more fanfictions ( putting the link from your story here)?
And you have a really good imagination.
Best wishes :3

absoultly fabulous!