Good start. Your focus on elizabeth’s Suspicion of David is developing well. More chapters.

Mmmmmmkaaay. You gonna leave me hanging like this?

Awesome story! Loved the interaction of these 2 characters-and this so goes perfectly with the new movie Alien Covenant! Thanks for posting!

Loved this. Good job.

Lovely little fiction.
Especially liked the first half

Nooooo please write more please please please!

What!? No more chapters!? D':

I'm really glad you showed David not only with emotions (we can just use our imaginations to how that is possible lol) but also apologetic. I really like that you gave him a legitimate excuse for his actions so that there is some hope of redemption. He's very straight foreward isnt he. Cant wait to read the next chapter so please please update soon.

This was quite interesting as to where in "Reality" the movie could lead, but the emotion aspect of David would truly not happen IMO. There were a few grammar mistakes and other things, though this was a good start. Maybe continuing this is a great idea, I hope you do.