This story was incredibly good. I liked how in depth all the characters were. Master Hand's motive was great, at least at the start. His ultimate decision to destroy everything makes sense when it is because Crazy Hand is dead now, and he'd rather do that than try to toss snake in the machine so he and everyone else can return, since it's not going to bring Crazy back.

The ending really needed to address what they did after their return, IMO. Like a lot of charas finally reacting to their memories being confirmed, and what had happened in the story.

The whole ending is rather sad when you examine the fates of all the characters. For all I know, even Zelda and Ganon cease to exist due to not being in the world where their destined reincarnator status applies at the time of death. Everyone who survives goes back to the smash world, but all their suffering seems to have just been for nothing. It's worse though when there is little clarification on what happens later on with the main characters and what good things might have happened after they finally made it back. All the effort without much of a payoff so to speak for the sacrifices in the story.

All that said, I still loved the story, it's too bad you don't seem to be writing fanfic anymore.

Many years ago I found this fanfiction and read the first few chapters available, which if memory serves was only 3 chapters. I lost the link to this fic and attempted to find it again, but I was unable to find it. 6 years later I finally find it once again and I have now read it in its entirety. My 13 year old self has finally gained peace, and can finally stop haunting me...
This was very good! I really liked how Ganondorf shows that he wants to change for the better, and saves Snake’s life. This was overall, a sort of sad fic, but I’m happy that the surviving people made it back home. It’s a happy ending that I think many characters were hoping for.
Thank you very much for writing this, and for keeping it up years later so I could find it once more. This was a great story!

Wow. That's all I can say. Wow.

This was recommended on the fuckyeahsnakus tumblr and I am very happy i clicked on this link. This story was so creative and touching that I just spent the past several hours reading it in one sitting.

There are so many things to love about this fic but I'd like to give a special shout out to the way you characterized everyone - especially Snake, Samus, Ganondorf, and Zelda. It just felt so right.

Also as a Snakus shipper the Snake/Samus scenes were A :D

So thanks for the great story, and now I'll have to look through the rest of your works!

(This is a really long and messy post, so I hope you don't mind. In short, I am hooked to this story. It's really good.)

Once again, your blessed writing skills have had me engrossed in a non-stop 2/3-solid-hour reading journey of adventure, thrill and mystery. There's a lot I want to say, but I'll try to list down my main points.

I can't really point or list any negatives I have found, besides a few punctuating errors and maybe misspelling or strange word ordering and sentence structuring. And by few I mean very few, almost rare. It doesn't matter too much though, they're just a few minor errors and it doesn't really take away anything from the story.

I love how you delivered the theme of indistinctiveness, where not everything is purely black or white. Truth amongst lies, insanity mixed in sanity, and vice versa - I've questioned myself very often who the true antagonist was, and expected the usual twist where the 'good' side turns out to be the opposite. The asylum is the perfect setting for demonstrating the theme of insanity and mystery, and for a while I find myself doubting the patients at one moment, and then the doctors again at another moment. I felt like I was going crazy myself.

For instance, I thought Rosalina and Dr. Soloro were acting strange, perhaps plotting their own things against Dr. Main. However, when I read about the introduction of the Raven, I was thinking how this mysterious upper being could be plotting something revolutionary altogether, and was just using the prisoners as pawns to overthrow the head of the mansion. Sam and Gann seemed sane enough to think and act rationally so I doubted this at first, but the part where Dr. Main brings up solid evidence of Samus' other life just greeted me like, "Hello, special delivery for you, it's a 'Guess-What-You're-Wrong' package!" And then I was thinking it could be fabricated evidence (which I sadly decided it wasn't), or that it was somehow true but not entirely true (the closest guess I could get to the truth).

Like a ping-pong ball in ping pong (that wording though), I kept on switching sides till I was no longer sure and I decided to read on. I was very confused, and this is one of the reasons I appreciate this story so much - mystery is very dominant and clear as a theme here. I could understand and see the story and cast of characters from the protagonist's (David) point of view, and thus connect and relate better.

If I had only discovered and you earlier, I believe the anticipation in waiting for the next chapter would have greatly contributed well to the overall theme of suspense and thrill and mystery. Mystery-filled moments and cliffhangers have me dying to know what happens next, and just what in the world happened. I felt like I was piecing together a jigsaw puzzle that could only be solved if you understood and knew each piece well. I could figure a few puzzles on my own, but otherwise I had to read the following chapters to answer my doubts.

One of my favorite things in this masterpiece is the subtle suggestions that I very often go past by without giving too much thought. Dr. Main's payback move was especially a real shocker. A pawn for a pawn, eh? My goodness, I could feel the shock and fury rising in me like how David must have felt. And the one where David was able to translate the tap morse codes by instinct. I should have known he had experiences as a soldier in war.

I really want to do reviews per chapter, but I suppose that will only be considered spamming. So I'll have to condense and put as much as I can into one cramped review, although the order is messy. And I was so excited (I almost squealed in glee at night when I saw a new post in my e-mail) that you were still writing stories till now. On top of that, it's Sci-Fi/Adventure themed! Yessssss.

I need to end my blabbering for now, so I'll say this is a story I will treasure in my life forever. I'm hoping to post my first fan fiction soon, but I need to revise it thoroughly and I'm a bit stuck with the ending. I'm thankful to have met (if not found, haha) a writer like you so I can improve my writing. Oh my goodness, I'm just spouting excitement all over. I really can't wait to read more of your works, yay!

HOLY CHEESES, I RELIAZED SOMETHING. DMDoctor Mario YLYoung Link PCPichu. Nice touch. :D

so, have you ever played golden sun...?

Holy sheeeeeet.
This was fantastic! I read this in only two and a half sittings (the 'half' was me scanning the first chap like a n00b), one of which kept me up late. I don't think I'll be saying anything new, but imma review anyway :P
You nailed the suspense/mystery, and there were some very interesting characters! I was having a quick flick through the earlier chapters (on your advice) and I noticed some very nice and subtle foreshadowing (I haven't seen that in a while). The ending was wonderfully vague, and though we had to say goodbye to a few characters, I'm happy it ended well.
I accidentally discovered the Raven's identity in another review X( But the revelation was not screamed out (literally or figuratively)! I love subtlety (as long as I pick up on it lol). DavidSnake saying "It's all of us" was aweeeesooome.
AND YOU SUBVERTED THE WHOLE AU VS 'CANON' THING. That was a crazy plot twist.
So I fangirled a bit over Isaac's last name. I was wondering why you gave him that name. (Small things amuse small minds...) Also, Kojima was too good.
I really liked the themes of sanity and truth, and even how they overlap and whatnot :DD Also looking at the god-reduced-to-mortal-status thing was interesting. I feel as though why exactly things happened the way they did (e.g. DavidSnake being separated) was somewhat Hand Waved, but maybe I'm looking too hard.
I remember reaching Chapter 10, looking at the chapter name and getting more excited than I've felt for a while at a 'serious' fic :3
So, yeah. I'm sure I'll be coming back to reread this one in the future!

This was great! Headcanon is that Kapp'nCrazy Hand, but idk lol. I really liked how you wrote this!

I love this! Great job!

This is cool! I look forward to seeing what happens.

Very good. I read just one page and im excited.

Conspiracyconspiracycliffhangersaaaaahhhhhh
Finally got around to reviewing - the awesomeness kept compelling me to continue reading. Yeah, this is fantastic so far. I'm not very genre savvy so I'm not really sure which of my suspicions to believe in, and what details might later be relevant. I guess that's a good thing for this sort of story!
I don't see anything wrong so far, other than like one typo a chapter or two back - I think it was [noticed] or something.
Those messages from the Raven are chilling... ooh I do love a short and sweet (lol choice of adjectives) threat. Funny that David and the others play checkers often and one of the messages was [Your turn, Main] :D
And... is that Byoshi? :O

Me again! It's almost as though the clinically sane ones are the deluded ones and the patients have it right. Or maybe that's the twist I'm rooting for. In any case, the Raven is Crazy Hand! That's mah theory and I'm sticking with it :3 (I look forward to being shot down...)

Anyway, enough Sherlocking. Great chapter, particularly with pacing. You've taken care to set up the Mansion and develop David as the story's protagonist without it being an info dump. Mystery fics are quite hard to pull off as you need to create the suspense without confusing the reader, but you have that balance so a big well done there :3

I enjoyed the conversation between David and the door / Raven. The way you described David writing dots and dashes and switching straight to letters was rather unsettling, as though he had just discovered a talent he hadn't needed until now. I wonder if this will be explored later on? Also, going by the number of keys on Isaac's chain, it sounds like all of the Smashers are in the asylum - so I'm definitely interested now! I half think the doctors/assistants are going to be assist trophies, which further cements my theory that Raven is Crazy. Maybe :3

I'd only suggest you revisit some sentences which can get a bit too lengthy at times (often with brackets) and can slow some readers' pace at reading and taking in the info. Otherwise, I really enjoyed this and am looking forward to reading more (apologies for my slow pace, though)!

B.

Can I just say something? Alright.
I'm glad I came along for the ride, and that, to put it plainly, is an understatement. Not only do I see an example of great writing, I see a message, and a powerful, meaningful one at that, one that could create waves within anyone. I don't want to blurt it out, because the journey to that message is what I enjoy. If I think deeply enough, I can see it unfold before me, in people in my life I know and admire greatly, and that's the best part. Call me a deep thinker and I will wholeheartedly agree, whether or not one would consider that a bad thing.
I thank you, WordMaster, for sharing Smashed Minds with this community, for giving us this perspective, for giving our wandering minds room to explore and travel. Don't let yourself and your talent disappear. May you be blessed on this wonderful Thanksgiving day/night!
-frostdragon64

Hey! I've just wedged myself back into writing SSB again and wanted to read some good SSB fic, so when this was advertised by Lady Pap on tumblr it was like a cue card for me to gatecrash :)

This is an amazing start, and I'm hooked! I like how you've turned the concept of the infamous Mansion to be an asylum, and am interested to see how you're going to handle and introduce the patients. I'm a bit wary of every single Smasher making it in - the cast size is always a problem for SSB! - but going by this opening chapter alone I think the premises of this story is in safe and capable hands.

There were a few tiiiiiny errors - off the top of my head I recall some misspellings and forgotten speech marks - but nothing big or disastrous at all. In fact, that you can string together a coherent chapter with paragraph breaks puts you heads and shoulders above the majority of this fandom's archive ;/ Your take on the ghostly Rosalina stood out to me in particular, as well as Samus (I'm very interested in her story, and the story overall in terms of what's real and what's not!).

Anyway, I've rambled on a bit too much so in summary - great start, and I'll be reading more soon :3

B.