This is interesting, full of emotion, but I feel like it needs more … What is the cause of Sophie's breakdown? How do things go from so wrong to so right?

Aw! That's so lovely! It's sweet and wonderful. The end rounds things off nicely.

Perfect grammar too, I think. That's quite rare, in my online reading experience, so I'm really happy to have seen that.

I haven't read the books. The part where you mentioned 'the vibrant and happy red turned to dark gray' confuses me. Does that have some meaning in the books?

This is... AMAZING.