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Man...it's just not Sonic's day, is it? I mean, is EVERYONE, EVERYWHERE COLORBLIND OR SOMETHING?

GODDAMMIT Sonic. Robotnik was trying to do something good this whole time, and when he FINALLY succeeds at it, you SCREW IT UP! This, this right here, is why vigilantism is a bad idea you guys! You never really know what the other person is actually up to!

This is a good fanfic

YEAH! That's my Rainbow Dash! The fastest flyer in all of Equestria!

You need to do this more often! OMG, I died laughing throughout this entire chapter! I literally laughed myself off of my chair...seriously, my entire floor is covered in popcorn now...it's sad and yet good at the same time. ANYWAY, what I'm trying to say is you did a great job! Keep up the good work!

Sonic can reach Mach 4 speeds.

I NEED A SEQUEL

I cant stop from reading this over and over dude, great story

This was... epic. It sent adrenaline rushing, brought smiles, and wrought tears at one point. The action scenes were incredible (I loved Discord's Soul - all the elements of space, stars and planets were amazing), and seeing Shadow's evolution across the story was moving.

Sure, there's quite a few things to improve - spelling and grammatical errors are common, but not to the point of detracting from the story. However, I did have some bad first impressions from errors in your story's description. On top of that, some of the bonus chapters are... questionable, but hilarious, nonetheless. Another thing - though I don't know how much would truly be added if this were the case - I feel as if you left the relationship between Sonic and Rainbow too foggy. Beyond the odd kiss or race, among others, not much was presented to us. I wouldn't put it as a focus of the story, but it's just itching to me as underdeveloped. That, and Romance is listed as one of the story's categories...

I know this is almost two years too late, and - frankly - I regret passing off both the MLP show and fandom for years under false impressions, but you are an inspiration. Seeing how much you progressed as a writer across your story is incredible - especially when you read it all in three nights. You can really see the difference. Sure, some of the chapters were a little down on power (particularly in the midsection), but they picked up with more than force than ever in your final strides (The Ultimate Lifeform brought a tear or two).

Iron out the tiny errors ("secrete" bugged me to no end...) and you will find yourself - if you haven't already - with bursting potential.

Best of luck for the future. I hope to see that "H" one day.

Y,know.., for the sake of my time.. I'm going to read this again..

Cupcakes had to appear eventually, didn't it? :D

"Like I'm about to knock them upside the head and drag them to my basement..."

...Cupcakes reference? :D

This was one of the first fan fiction that I have ever read on this website, this story is very well written and it has a amazing storyline.

please update! I'm begging you this was a great story!