That was creepy but poignant.

Wow. Julie Lawry is an incredibly unsympathetic character, in fact she really managed to get under my skin in her few pages of being there. (Or maybe it was just that she fucked Nick Andros, haha) But you make her seem likable, which is quite a feat. I almost feel bad for her in this instance. Kudos.

Very well done. You have real skills as a writer- you craft some fine sentences, filled with evocative imagery that pulls the reader along...never drawing attention to itself, but always drawing in to the story. In my experience, very few of the authors on this site can sustain a working, readable narrative for more than three or four paragraphs. If they can write well (as in good sentence structure), they often can't tell a proper story. You do both.
I was especially impressed that you able to take a character like Julie Lawry (not a very sympathetic girl!), and make me care about her, see her for more than a villain- and you did it without the usual fanfic trope (which I really don't care for) of just ignoring the ACTUAL CHARACTER.
Great job, I'll be looking for more of your work...