I loved it! The imagery at the beginning was spectacular! Another good job from you! Yay! But one suggestion? Make some paragraphs if possible. It sort of hurt my eyes to read it, you know? I'm not trying to be rude or anything, I just want to help in anyway I can! Thanks! XD

hey, loved this. just a word of advice though, to make this easier to read, you may want to double space the end bit. all the words seem a little to close

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Awwww thats so sad!