I like it. Very funny. Especially Sly and Fox fighting over Carmelita. Here's a dare: I dare Sly to go into a locked room with Pawny for 5 minutes.
-Jercer

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Random name said, "Blah blah blah."

Quotation marks need to be around the dialogue, dialogue tags are needed, actual description, etc. At the moment this type of story can't stay the way it is on fanfiction. If you don't want to rewrite it, you can do a Google search for places that will allow this type of content and simply remove it from here, and post it on there.

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