Reviews for Agent of Chaos
Irokoi chapter 8 . 12/28/2008
I love it. It's sort of like Tex Avery meets Rumiko Takahashi with a twist of Robert Haynie mixed in for good measure.
Ganheim chapter 8 . 11/9/2008
Chapter I: Midget of Destruction

It was late; the last red-gold rays of the sun were fading away like the last hundred dollars in a gambler's bank account,

[That is the most comic way I have ever heard of describing a sunset.]

Ranma was on his feet and into a fighting stance in the amount of time it takes most people to decide between being slowly tortured to death or having an ice-cream cone.

[Points: 1]

The little man drew out a mallet easily twenty times his own size and smashed Ranma on the head with it. "Never ask why," he thundered sternly, and then added, "It's terribly rude."

[Points: 1]

The next day dawned bright and early-which was a good thing, seeing as any day in the summer that dawned dark and late would have astrologers and doomsayers whipped into foam-mouthed hysterics. Not to mention the havoc it'd cause on the solar-powered car race scheduled that afternoon.

[Points: 1]

Oh... no, it nothin'."

[it's]

"A funny feeling?" Nabiki said, appearing so suddenly beside Ranma that he nearly shot through the roof. "What kind of funny feeling?" Her eyes narrowed. "An Impending Doom kind of feeling? A Massive-Property-Damage-Is-Imminent kind of feeling?"

[I think they all end up being 'large scale property damage' kind of thing.]

Daddy's already there; he's a judge.

[Missing closing quotation marks.]

Kasumi nodded. "Alright, imouto-chan. Have fun!"

[Obligatory Japanese.]

The other person who wore it usually went around in a blue gymnastics leotard, twirling a long red ribbon and laughing hysterically at nothing.

[Usually? The colour in the manga is inconsistent, and in the anime I'm pretty sure Kuno Kodachi's leotard is green.]

Ranma had the extra effect of looking like a few herds of elephants had decided he was a pretty good place to stampede.

[Points: 1]

Chapter II: Black Sunday-With Green and Yellow Stripes

successor to the Crouch of the Leaping Tiger.

[ Wasn't it 'crouch of the fallen tiger'?]

The Masters of Anything-Goes sat down suddenly, eyes swirly and hands up in gestures that might be roughly translated as "Begone Thou Source of Pain" or perhaps "Owie!"

[Points: 1]

Nevertheless, most of the stubborn savages continued onward as the ninjas watched with interest, eating popcorn and making a running commentary.

[Points: 1]

"And I see that your trans-dimensional mallet is as big as mine."

[I had a flashback to a very cheesy spoof.]

Chapter I: Architecture, and Annoying the Gods

"What I don't understand is, how did he manage to follow you all the way here?"

"A good question," Nabiki mused, looked at the now-swaying King of Bad Senses of Direction. "Maybe it was the fact he couldn't see."

[Points: 1]

Which was rather odd, since he didn't remember having any windows in his room.

[Didn't the Saotome guest room have a north-facing window? I clearly remember it being used not only for escapes but also infiltrations on numerous occasions.]

contemplating his life, the universe, and the fifth floorboard on the right that creaked loudly when he walked by,

[Points: 1]

...The sky was an emerald blue.

Eyes glazing dangerously, Ranma casually slid the door shut again.

What a nice day to stay inside.

[Points: 1]

Chapter IV: When Chaos Sneezes

But how to tell with these seasoned, trained martial artists?

Well, the bright red glows were good clues.

"WHERE IS HE?" Soun Tendo roared. "I WILL KILL HIM!"

[Points: 1]

and Loud Fisherman's Wife, too too tragic story of circus seal that drown fifty year ago because he forgot how swim, and not so tragic story of noisy woman I drown last week."

[Points: 1]

"Drowned Panda and Girl!"

[But of course, it would have to be the opposite. At least, _I_ think that would be riotously funny.]

Yes? flip Something the matter, Tendo?

[Punctuation]

After all, you didn't fight somebody like Genma Saotome every morning for more than ten years without knowing everything there is to know about how to fight people who fight dirty.

[Points: 1]

At this point, the martial artist's wearied gray matter threw up its hands in despair and ordered a full system shut-down. I can't work with the massive sensory overload I've been getting, it complained, and it's time for my vacation.

[Points: 1]

Chapter V: Of Portable Holes and Cheese-Whiz

with her thump and forefinger, "you're

[thumb]

Weird thought about it, opened his mouth to respond-and then bit down on Ranma's finger as hard as he could.

[Points: 1]

position of being imbedded head-first into a wall.

[Spelling: embedded]

Akane gave him a glazed look. "Weird man go down the hole," she told him in a little-girl voice.

[I'm thinking Animaniacs' “Mindy”.]

the stare-step stands of the Coliseum

[Spelling: stair]

"Ranma!" Soun cut in, glaring at his future son-in-law with fierce concentration. "It is you who must protect this household!"

"What about you? It ain't even my house!

[I wonder why I haven't heard him use this line in canon.]

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Chapter VI: Chaos Unabated-and Really Nasty, Too

quickly reaching what is know in a time

[Spelling: known]

Agent of Chaos Chapter VII: In Which Spandex Flies

where Vegeta was busy arguing with a blue- haired, pointy-eared fellow

[My guess is 'Magus' from Chrono Trigger.]

"I don't know what's okay where you come from, but here, that's just not polite."

[Points: 1]

light coming form up top.

[from]

"Just who the hell is goin' to have to LENIENT?"

[to _be_ lenient?]

trying to make of for a lack of any facial

[make _up_ for]

"What kind of horrible villain are you?" she gasped, shocked to the core. "You didn't even let him finish his monologue!"

[Points: 2]

"THAT'S WHAT I ASKED!"

"WHAT?"

[I don't know. Third base.]

"You look a little pail!"

[pale?]

"Are you okay, imouto-chan?

[Obligatory Japanese]

So let it be know,

[known]

Chapter VI: Where No Midget Has Gone Before

chopsticks, (when he actually bother to use them) platters,

[Spelling: bothered. Oh, and since the parenthetical seems to apply to the utensil instead of platters, it should go before the comma that separates list elements.]

"You both girls, right?"

[you're]

Wordlessly, Akane pointed outside through her window-which only extended about three feet before it met a thick metal wall anyway,

[The window actually would the the same as always. The _view_ would only extend three feet.]

that would do us the rest of us."

[The first 'us' is unneeded.]

tri-quarters beeping

[I looked it up and they're spelled 'tricorders']

Please direct any C&C (PLEASE let there be some) to .

[There's nothing here. QuickEdit eats emails and URLs, so you'll have to try new clever things like “ .com”.]
ForgottenSmile chapter 8 . 3/6/2006
I haven't enjoyed a funny fanfic like this in a long while. I love it! Continue?
Daimyo Shi chapter 6 . 2/24/2003
I never reall was into DragonballZ but I have to admit that Goku, Gohan and Venga [dame I missing something oh well you know who]was great in Ukyo's!
Daimyo Shi chapter 8 . 2/24/2003
Great a New Chapter of Wonderful Chaos. I glad that I could help. I look forward to more chapters of the wonderfully funny story. I really have enjoyed it alot. I was even rereading it all last night. I gave me a very good laugh! I look forward to more hopefulyy very soon
Unseen Watcher chapter 1 . 2/21/2003
Still don't like you. _~
Kura-kun chapter 8 . 2/20/2003
Lol.I want to be an agent of chaos too :D

*goes through the cleaners and comes put 6 inches big*
SailorVeggie SailorAnime chapter 2 . 2/19/2003
this is a very sick it's funny anyway
Rogue1615 chapter 8 . 2/19/2003
Oh i want more of this. You should have Q confront Mr. Weirs. Something about him bothering Q's favorate mortals.

Heeheheheeheheh.

I look forward to more,

rogue1615
BlazeStryker chapter 8 . 2/19/2003
Oh,Gah. I'm so glad you're doing this!

Worf Vs. Genma! The honorable son of Morg and the Honor-Shredder NEED to bash each other for a few hours!

As for Ranma, he's likely to be protected once Deanna gets even ten milliseconds insight into him-but would Akane EVER get out of the brig after her typical response? **consulting the Magic 8-ball** The Stars say No.

Later! :)
Aleh chapter 8 . 2/19/2003
Yes, well, it's good to see you back. What I want to see more of, though, is Orange Gi and Miniskirts.
Daimyo Shi chapter 7 . 1/9/2003
please tell me you going to add to this chaos I really do enjoy it. I know you haven't post anything in a while but could you please get back to this chaos!
Daimyo Shi chapter 1 . 10/24/2002
I want more sweet CHAOS! I love it, I have to wonder what spring Nabiki nearly fell in too! I really hope you write more I love to see it finished. and that short little runt to get what coming to him! BAWAHAHAHAHA
mobius1disaster chapter 7 . 8/28/2002
LOL! funny write more.
BlazeStryker chapter 7 . 8/27/2002
Frankly, this is superb, but after putting them in.. *gurgling in nausea* a ZORD, Who What Wierd must PAY!

I suggest Skuld's hammer followed by Mallet-Sama into lunar orbit, followed by the Girl Days' Ranma taking one look and getting out the Ran-Mallet!
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