I LOVE IT ! I ADORE IT !

This is awesome! I would have loved to see what happens to them and Serahs stupid face after finding that out. XD Great! Favo!

Gah! Super cute. Snow and lightning definitely have UST, right? They're perfect for one another. PLEASE write more snow/light fics, this one is well-written and descriptive :)

I loved this story! awesome job, and i feel the same way :P lightning and snow would've made a better more interesting couple. serah and him don't make a good match lol. i hope you write more snow x lightning fics xD so rare to see good fanfics like these :)

Trust me when I tell you that you are not the only one shipping this couple. ;)

I think this is very entertaining. There are a few facets of the plot that I find hard to buy, but considering the entertaining and humorous nature of the story, I find them all easy to overlook. You've made me long to see what comes next, but I fear that the humor would have to disappear in favor of angst (which is more how I picture this couple - full of angst over their impossible love.)

The story is well paced, the dialogue feels authentic and flows very well, the humor is well-timed and doesn't feel forced.

Now for some con-crit. I hope you take it in the spirit in which it's offered:
My one complaint with the narrative style is the Omniscient POV. Omniscient POVs tend to end up reading like 'head hopping' and distance the reader from the narrative rather than draw them in. The story starts in Snow's POV and then shifts to Lightning's mid-chapter without any breaks or indication of the switch. Then it ends with an Omniscient narrator telling what happened:
"It didn't take long for them to end up on the bed again, with Lightning on top and with both of them trying to drink in as much of the other as they could."
This sentence is more like a third party is in the room watching the scene. I find that sticking with one character's POV in a scene lets the reader really lose himself/herself in the story and experience it with all senses, rather turn them into a spectator. I feel like Omniscient POVs make the readers lazy - we don't have to figure things out because the narrator is telling us everything instead of showing us things.

All in all, I thought this was a fun one shot and a great Lightning/Snow experience. I personally love this pairing and don't think there are enough stories out there for them. I enjoyed the read.
Thank you for sharing.

Amazing story, you need to do more Final Fantasy one-shots.

I love Snow and Lighting together so I definitely hope that you do some more one shots or even continue this one to see where the relationship might go. I thought you really captured the flow and also their characters very well.

I like your writing style, it all flows really well and was a delight to read. Also super thrilled that there is a new snow/light fic and i'm really hoping you keep them up!.

LOVED IT!