Kagome went easy on him. If I were her I would have sung misery business by Paramore or Go Screw Yourself by Avery. Cry Me a River by Justin Timberlake is a good one as well.

Fuck you

YAY!*sniff sniff glance glance* MORE MORE MORE MUAH HA HA! ;P

Hi um just wanted to tell you you're using humility wrong the word you want is humiliation. Sorry my mom is an English teacher I can't hep it.

(that's my real name) (i have a fanfiction) this story is really good! Like... REALLY! _

whooohooo GO SESSH!

I would like to start off with saying hello.

As far as I can tell, you look over your work. You may have a beta. I think that the fact you value the quality of you work is nice. Thanks for that.

Right above ‘Sango would have given’ (that line) you should put a horizontal line. Maybe when you were writing you had one but FF tends eat them up. Perhaps edit it and put one in?

Again, I recommend a horizontal line above ‘Ring, Ring, Rin’. Perhaps when you upload you could check over how you work looks on FF before uploading.

Moshi Moshi? Should that possibly be split with a comma, second turned to lowercase and such? I’m not good with fan-girl Japanese (which I’m certain this is, seeing as I’ve never heard it used). Possibly substitute this for I’m coming, I’m coming.

"Hey, Sesse." she greeted.

"Kagome, it is nice to hear from you." he said, his voice dropping an octave.

I doubt Sesshomaru would allow someone to call them that. It seems OOC of him.

I won’t go further than chapter 1 because I just wanted to leave a review. I would consider taking my words into consideration but there is one more thing I would like to ask.

This is a song-fic? In future chapters I guess it would make sense but I would assume you know the rule of no song-fic correct? Anyways if they are songs from a band I would substitute them with your own lyrics just so this doesn’t get reported.

I know your story is complete; I just wanted to drop a review.

Sincerely,

Enji Da.

contunua ... **

nice job and can't wait to read the sequel and also other chapter on Dokuga! it's one of my favorite sites and that is terrible that you got complained about by a newbie... pathetic! you are an amazing writing and what you do to the stories are amazing! keep up the great work all around and nice job!

NICE!
Now to read the sequel.

Not to be rude but if you're so senoir then me shouldn't you know that the admins do squat around here? Even if I reported you it'd be months out if they ever did get aroud to it.

That is so not right what the person did. And go kagome

Perfect ending! 3

Song-fics are not allowed on FF. Please remove the songs from your story. Otherwise the story is good.

i like the song that you use and keep writing more plz! .