Reviews for Undone |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I know your Probably not contain in the story as it was uploaded on here in 2012 but it’s a really good story and I think if you can spare some time you should at least add some more chapters. It’s really good we need more magi stories like this. |
![]() ![]() It's not over yet... in my hea. |
![]() ![]() ![]() are you trying to torment me?! I have been itching to read a fic with an older Aladdin and you do this! WTF?! You have ANY idea how much potential there is in this?! For Frig's sake, have some decency! Don't go around getting people's hopes up and then deliver trash! The idea is brilliant but I think you may want to rewrite this. Oh and maybe using line breaks would be better? cause frankly that [FLASH BACK /end/ - Aladdin] looks sloppy and I really don't think you need to mention if it's third or first pov constantly, the reader should be able to discern that on their own, however in the case of it being someone else other than the original person's pov then a small note should suffice in alerting your readers of the switch, no? |
![]() ![]() Please update |
![]() ![]() ![]() Interesting. |
![]() ![]() ![]() OMG! That Aladdin is hot O.o |
![]() ![]() ![]() I really hope you continue witting this. I Love it SO much, and really hope it doesn't go unfinished. :) Great Work! |
![]() ![]() ![]() What just happened to Aladdin?! Judal is so interested in him! Alibaba is too confuse and Kassim is alive (at the moment)? |
![]() ![]() ![]() X3 This is a really interesting story so far. Can't wait to see what happens next |
![]() ![]() ![]() I loved it next chapter next chapter next chapter please soon. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ohh well this is more interesting. So it's Aladdin from the future, but it changed the time flow because his younger self died? |
![]() ![]() ![]() Well it's off to an intriguing start! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Cool :) |
![]() ![]() ![]() OOOOOOOOOOH! NICE CHAP! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Hell yeah, you updated! (Although short in length, I enjoyed it nonetheless ) As for "realistically overpowered", I kinda get what you mean, since he is a magi and also know as "Solomon's proxy" if I'm not mistaken. And the magic part, I think it's called "rukh". |