Reviews for Stretch |
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Mangaqueen1158 chapter 1 . 8/2/2018 Aw this was so cute and so good. Thanks |
tamashiyuki chapter 1 . 11/6/2015 Very goooooood! |
1sunfun chapter 1 . 4/5/2013 Nice. |
angela chapter 1 . 1/20/2013 omg! hot! and so cute...i wish there was more... |
Alishabear chapter 1 . 12/25/2012 The story was amazing! I hope to read more like it |
Thatsallwegot chapter 1 . 12/8/2012 Love. |
Fire-Metal-Horse17 chapter 1 . 12/8/2012 I love it! Very well written, well done! |
beargirl1393 chapter 3 . 10/28/2012 Sequel? |
PhoenixPixie chapter 3 . 9/17/2012 This is the second |
Eiri and Kurama lover07 chapter 3 . 9/11/2012 Loved it! Perhaps you would consider a sequel? If the little inspiration bug bites ya. |
Deviouslytwisted chapter 3 . 7/24/2012 Fantastic I love it |
Imalena chapter 3 . 7/24/2012 Hey, nice story. Lots of lemon ;-) Just a 2 things to say : don't use acronym (w/ in place of with ; & in place of and) because it "breaks" the text. Also, don't write huuuuuge paragraph that is so really hard to read (it happened in chapter 1 and 2, but chapter 3 was perfect ;-) Other than that, it would have been nice to have more "story", or at least, a little bit more plot ;-) Thank you for writting this story, until next time |
TarquinFurie chapter 1 . 7/21/2012 I have to agree that it seems like you could use a beta reader, or maybe a read through, there were some places where I thought there needed to be comma's, or perhaps two sentences instead of one. It was pretty good though, for right of the top of your head. It could be better paced, but since this is your first I wouldn't be too hung up about it. But I would work on your rhythm and pacing for future endeavors, I read plenty of PWP's in which there is excellent pacing and rhythm, so it can be done. Good Luck and keep writing. |
Demyx101 chapter 2 . 7/21/2012 Considering this is your first fanfic, I am very, very impressed! :D As a major smutty/yaoi fangirl I loved reading every word! Very hot ;) A few things I would improve on are the slight spelling mistakes (But hey, every story has at least some of those), but there are very few so that's good :3 Also, instead of having really long paragraphs I'd suggest breaking them up a bit, just so they're easier for the viewers to read. Other than that, I REALLY enjoyed this fic and am looking forward to more of your work! Keep it up! :) |
JoshGrobanite97 chapter 1 . 7/21/2012 Hello! Just thought I'd drop by and let you know that I loved this! That was just fabulous. Keep it up! |