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I read this fic awhile ago but since I'm rereading it again, I thought I might as well comment since you deserve it :D really love this fic and even tho I'm not into bdsm, this is an exception ;) By the way, dunno if you still read the reviews of this story, but don't listen to the dumb guest review before me. We are all allowed to write whatever we want and just because we write something doesn't mean we condone it in real life. And of course it's in guest mode, typical ball-less troll -_-

Go fuck yourself, you abuse/rape loving whore.

I see you also started to write a omega verse story, and as omega verse is thought by all people who hate rape, and are not turned on by it like the writers on the verse, to be the biggest rape/sexism trope there is, I know you must get of on rape abuse and sexism.

Hahaha I'm 4 years late... this was so fucked up but great writing skills

Is it bad that I bust out laughing when he screamed "hamburger"? XD

Oh... My... God. Just wow. Just... Woooooooow. So brain dead. I don't know whether to love or hate this. I can totally connect to alfreds mixed emotions about what's going on. Arthur went too far with the camera. Wayyyyyyyyy too far. Just omg wow. So cold hearted to expose his secrets like that to the newspaper. Completely ruined both of their reputations. Glad they got a happy ending though. Sorry I can't give better feed back my head is just a little overwhelmed right know. Just know it's good. I'll be reading more of your stuff, already read the Invitational Year and the Sophomore Year. Continue writing... Just wow.

Love!

Wow... Just wow... I have no words for this... Well, except for the fact that it was downright perfect.

I don't know why you're not completely satisfied with this, because I totally am! I mean, sure Alfred was a douche at some point and so was Arthur, but they are both human, they make dreadful mistakes, and learn from them. They were young and stupid, but as they grew, they understood that they did love each other, but a bit too selfishly, and changed that. At least that's how I see it. I really do love this with a passion. Just a humble advice, splitting it into chapters can help making this easier to read, since it's long. But still, it doesn't take away how wonderful it is. I like it, I really, really like it :D

Hey, this is a fic I really want to read, and I have read the beginning several times, and it seems quite good. The only problem I have is it being only one chapter. Due to the sis of the story it makes it hard to find a place in your reading after leaving for a moment, so if it wouldn't possibly be too much trouble I would greatly appreciate if you split the story into chapters

It was reallllly hard to watch them destroy each other and although I don't think they would have realistically ever been able to bounce back and manage a healthy relationship, the final scene was really beautiful and yes, made me cry. I'm just a sap like that. So sappy Canada could harvest from me for years...okay wow that got really weird really fast. Never mind.

Despite what you're saying in your author notes, I think this fic is actually very good! I enjoyed reading it and got kinda emotional at some parts. Which means you did a pretty good job here! The fic also seems kinda dark to me... ah, well... I feel pretty sorry for both Arthur and Alfred. They both seemed so confused. Arthur didn't manage his relationship with Alfred very well and ended up hurting Alfred (somehow Alfred's pain brought emotion from me the most). But Alfred also was a jerk to Arthur so I feel bad for Arthur too, and I feel bad for him as he seemed to struggle and try hard in the relationship but not manage it and suffer from it. But it's nice that everything ended nicely for them. I can accept all the drama and all the angst, especially when the ending is good and happy. :')

I just think that maybe it'd be better to write the story, like... linearly? First past, then present, etc. I'm not sure though. I think you know better what would be best for your own story, haha. It's just that the whole part with remembering the past is pretty long so it's hard to return back to present when that part ends. It feels a little abrupt. Because I already got immersed into their past story and it was a little difficult to immerse back into their present. Idk how to explain.

But no, the story is still good! So even if you leave it the way it is, it's fine I think. :) Anyway, great story, yeah!

Continuation (I accidentally tapped the post review button. Tablets are exasperating): Although I have long moved on, this fic really made me look at my past in retrospect.

"We both broke that trust a long time ago, when we were young and cruel to each other."

Man, that line just hit me right at home. You don't know how I craved to say that to the one I had hurt and apologise so that we can finally have that closure.

Glad the story ended well for them. In my real life, I know I must work to have a happy ending as close to this. Hope that in my lifetime, there would be a chance for me to mend.

Hello, this review might be quite old but I still would want to praise this fic for being a powerful one based on my opinion as an avid fan of short stories, be it original or fan fiction. Casting aside the flaws of describing a real BDSM community, how you have written the story and how the each character's motives were laid out is just brilliant and moving. Maybe, it's a litle biased on my part for I also experienced being in a relationship that utterly lacks clarity and proper communication. Back then, I once got through loving a person and loathing them at the same time. This fic really made me think of my past in retrospect.

This was really fucking long for a one-shot...and also I wanted to strangle Alfred for 1) having sex with the frog 2) lying to Arthur 3) being a asshole by publishing that story and using Arthur 4) being a total ass and stealing from Arthur 5) for not appreciating it when Arthur was nice to him (damn brat) so yeah I kinda wanted to kill Alfred but Arthur I got pissed at him for being fucking rude and filming Alfred yeah that got me upset. This was a well written fic and I can one is even if I can't write one! But now I must read more so good bye!