Overall I did love your story. There were a few grammatical errors in a couple of sentences, but they were very minor and could be easily overlooked by people who aren't nitpicky Grammar Nazis. By fanfiction standards, your grammar was excellent.

As for the concept itself, I can't say that I have read anything like this before. It was suspenseful and created a slight feeling of anxiety over the fate of the characters. I don't scare easy, but this did make me anxious. I liked that when you decided to write a horror story you did not just write a description of a gory, messy murder scene. You made it more about the mentality of the characters, which I personally think fits very well with Death Note. It wasn't gory or filled with jump scares, instead you focused in on the mental trauma, or at least at seemed like that was what you were attempting to do.

As with all stories, I can see room for growth and improvement. For example, I would have liked to see something relating back to the line of the song "They strung up a man the say who murdered three." Obviously Light killed a lot more than three people. But I could see how maybe you could have incorporated that into your story by having only two ropes next to Misa, a representative type of thing. Maybe one of them as a stand in for his father and another one for L. In Death Note, L had quite a bit of impact on Light and his mentality. For example, L kept Light on his toes. After L's death, Light got sloppy (which helped Near and Mello defeat him). Light's father also had quite a bit of impact on Light's psyche. He influenced Light to become a detective.
As for Misa, you established that he did have some feelings for her.
Alternatively, you could have worked it in somewhere that the line "They say who murdered three," is representative of the three main obstacles he faced in his quest to become a god. The detective L, and his top two successors Mello and Near. Or the line could have been representative of Light's family, he had a mother, a father, and a sister. Each one of them experienced grief due to his actions as Kira. Light's father died because of the Kira case, his mother lost her husband and son (and was left to look after her traumatized daughter), his sister was kidnapped, traumatized, lost her father and brother, and potentially had her career ruined before it began (assuming that it came out that her brother was Kira: people can be quite judgmental about those types of things). Furthermore, if it did come out that Light was Kira, his mother and sister could have been killed by vengeful criminals. To conclude the line "They strung up a man they say who murdered three," could have been exploited as a metaphor for Light ruining the lives of a specific three characters.

To conclude this very long review, your story was written very well and I very much enjoyed reading, analyzing, and reviewing it. It got me thinking, and if a story can make me think about something, it's a good story in my opinion. I always try to leave constructive criticism in my reviews. Not just an "awesome job, loved it." or a "terrible job, hated it." If you read through that entire thing cool. If you didn't, also cool. It was just my suggestions for improvement based on my analysis of one line from a song and a fictional story. You don't have to take any of this seriously if you see it.

So.. she was still the happy, Light loving Misa? Not sad? That's good. Because I imagine that if she's still attempting to win his favor, she still likes him. So, yay! I am glad. Great story! ,

Awesome job writing around the song. Very good job with the dark, suspense, and scary concepts.

p.s. Why did you kill me?

luv it!

This was really good! Very spooky and haunting - and I think that the Hanging Tree song worked really well. Sometimes I find that incorporating a song can be distracting from the actual story line, but it fitted in nicely here.

The only criticism is towards the final section. I think you tried to tell the readers what was happening through the dialogue between the task force which was unnecessary as we could guess what was going to happen next (because of the nooses already lined up). Also I felt Near's dialogue was a bit drawn out. I'm only pointing this out because it took away from some of the suspense in the scene. Sometimes less is more. But really this is just me being nit-picky; it was still a fantastic and engaging read!

Since it's not fair to criticise without pointing out the good aspects here they are: I felt you kept everyone in character and that their responses were realistic. I mean everything from Misa's confusion at the beginning to her horror at realising what Light was going to do was understandable. Light was very well done too. The fear from the Task force upon realising they were going to die was great - I really liked the explanation of being unable to move and Matsuda's thoughts before he died. The story also flowed well and wasn't boring at any point. I also noticed no grammar/ spelling mistakes.

So anyway, great job it was engrossing and well-written. It'd be great to see more suspense/ horror stories from you too as (for a series that is basically a suspense/ horror) there isn't that much of it.

How does this have no reviews? This is amazing! I dislike crossovers but The Hunger Games and Death Note seem to fit. This technically isn't a crossover but it is a Misa fic which I really dislike but wait this isn't a hate comment. Fedpite all of that you kept my attention, song fics are hard to write yet this was amazing. I loved it and it was amazing when I log in I will put this in my favorites. But that will be in the morning. In case I forget please message me - Phantom 1313