Sally wasn't OOC here. That's along the lines of how I'd imagine her to act when she's just about to get wedded to that handsome love of her life.

Plus, I think this was a nice open ending - not just to the chapter but to the story - where the reader could just imagine the wedding playing out as previously described.

Le gasp! My birthday is August 13!

I love this story! You really did a great job. I hope someday you will continue it. :)

How sweet! I can't wait to see the wedding. :)

Poor Holley! Never having a chance at a real life... At least now she will get a taste of it at the wedding. :)

-_- that proposal. WHY I NO THINK OF THAT BEFO?

well, Sally did seem a bit OOC but when you're getting married, ya tend to get OOC xD

keep it up hon!

Flaws? What flaws? ;)

I can't find anything to critique about! (do I say sorry?)
Seriously. Maybe a twinge more detail, but other than that...Pfft.
I love Lightning and Sally, and this is ADORABLE!

*claps* not only are you an amazing editor but an amazing writer! *bows* you are freakin Celestia!

I like the lame compliment Lightning said :3 makes him the dorky fiancee in a way can't wait for more! 3

whoa whoa whoaaa, Bonnie? YOUTUBE BONNIE? ohh heyyy :D can you guess who i am? XD nawww i thought they were fine, they weren't OC-ish :P ''she never left his side'' ahhh im seeing the SalQueen already xD nice work :3

(MissCarrera)

Even if you won't be finishing this, thank you for sharing! And you call this toilet writing skills? No way! I noticed some minor dialogue errors but other than that it is good! :)

Awwww, cute!
You should stop putting yourself down. This has potential for an awesome story! If you want, you could copy and paste these into a private message to me, and I'll help you a little bit, then you can post them again. I'd be happy to help, and you don't have to give me credit.
Just remember, we can't do a beta reader or anything, because that doesn't work on an iPod, which I use. I don't have a computer.
But either way, I'd love to help if you want help.
Just PM me :-)

I don't think it was too OOC. I thought it was really good. You had a great balance of dialogue and detail. I'm reading the next chapter, and I hope you continue this!