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Rather adorable~

I am considerably biased towards children (though they are definitely cuter written then in real life when messes are very, very real .)

Although I'm sure you've improves by leaps and bounds since posting this story (I see that date up there), I do have a pointer for you to keep an eye out on with this chapter in particular:

- The paragraph formatting structure is a little off. Especially the paragraph starting with "Murasakibara looked morosely". It is a tad too long and makes it difficult for readers to generate the interest to keep going. Plus, keep in mind the grammatical rules: when someone new speaks, it belongs in a new paragraph, and new ideas start a new one as well.

Other than that, it was an enjoyable (if fluffy) read and I enjoyed it. Thanks a bunch for writing this and I look forward to your future works when and if they come. :)

Read a little, write a little,
Jay Desirel

EEEEE KAWAII \(**)/

AWWWWWW TOTALLY CUTE EVEN THOUGH ITS BEEN THREE YEARS SINCE YOU UPDATED YOU SHOULD STILL UPDATE

Kya Soooo cute Demo, demo I wish to see those chibi jealous

that was instant anti-depresant

Those cute little diablos..

This was just too adorable! You got the miragen down to the tiniest detail! Loved this s much!

Hello I love your fic, especially Kagami, is so sweet and cute, and also so innocent, and children love them both, I hope they make more fics with Kagami protagonist, continues, thanks and kisses.

Very adorable! :)

I'M DYING BECAUSE OF THESE CUTENESS. THANKS FOR WRITING AND SEE YOU IN HEAVEN

OMG! that is so cute

Hahah what is this? Happy birthday Kagami!
kekeke look at all this adorableness

OTL OMG THAT WAS ADORABLE. THEY ACTUALLY ALL LOVE KAGAMI.

Daww, how cute.
Haha now I can just imagine the chibi GoM being protective of Kagami XD