Reviews for The Steps Towards Being With You |
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SuClover chapter 3 . 10/31/2013 Hahaha that was cute! I look forward the next chapter! Update soon! |
RuruPuppy2854 chapter 3 . 12/9/2012 Ahahah! Hans is too easily embarrassed. IF I ever get boyfriend like that, he'd be fun too tease. Seeing him blush would be a sight to behold. I can't wait for the next chap! |
Strawberry Eggs chapter 3 . 10/24/2012 You know what's a bit odd? What I most liked about this chapter was that it was longer than the past two. It gives it more time for the fluff and silliness going on in this chapter. Once again, this fits right into the game itself. At least Hans has relaxed around Annie, but where will it go from there, hmm? I spied some typos and one or two potentially missing words, but otherwise nothing too major grammar-wise. What I thought was a bit distracting was how you "spelled out" the laughter. That might work fine in a comic book, but not so much in prose writing. It's better just to write something like "she laughed hysterically" as it takes up space unnecessarily. Just a minor tip. Otherwise, this was a great chapter! |
RuruPuppy2854 chapter 2 . 10/22/2012 It's so cute! Can't wait for the next chapter! |
Pile of Ash chapter 2 . 7/28/2012 Please continue and write more! This couple deserves more attention! This is a really cute story and you're a very good writer. |
Strawberry Eggs chapter 2 . 7/23/2012 The chapters are a little on the short side, but I think this fic is off to a strong start. Telling the story from Hans's perspective is a nice touch, as it really gets across his nervousness and awkwardness. Annie is utterly clueless about romance, just as she is in the game. These first two chapters and the overall scenario feel right out of the game. I see no typos or other major errors, and the length thing isn't even that important. This is quite good so far, so I hope you'll continue it soon! |
The Reborn Honeybee chapter 2 . 7/13/2012 XD Very funny. I like nervous Hans XD |
delfiros chapter 2 . 7/4/2012 This is a really good Story! Hans is so clueless sometimes... But that's what makes him so cute! From: Feao Elvier |
The Reborn Honeybee chapter 1 . 6/6/2012 Very funny, I can't wait for the next chapter! Go HansxAnnie! :D Update soon! |