I just found ur story last night and I'm already addicted. It must be hard for Sakura :(
Anyway I'm looking for the sequel but didn't find it. Have u write it?
Anyway I'm really glad to read this story, thank you

Wow... I really enjoyed this fic! It's really awesome!
Have you already write the sequel?

I think I'm going to be addicted to your fics ahahah I want to read them all! :D
You're really awesome! Great job :)

You are one heck of a writer! Sakura was absolutely frustrating, but I kinda understand her character. She's basically desperately lonely. At some points you had me completely NejiSaku and then I was completely NaruSaku. Then I was angry at this whole Uchiha thing and Sakura being all self-sacrificing. This was awesomely frustrating. I can't say I'm happy with ItaSaku in the end (although I LOVE that pairing). The fluffy part of me wishes Sakura would say screw the Uchiha and marry Naruto.

Anyway, I'm looking forward to that sequel! :)

love it please put up the sequel soon

This first chapter was pretty poor.

Your sentence structure was often rigid and out of place. It disrupted the flow of the story. There were also continuous run-ons and a needless abundance of misplaced commas.

Examples:

"She had repeatedly punched Naruto to Suna in her anger, or rage, of what the blond haired idiot of their team had said, or done, to the sweet Kunoichi." (You wanted Kakashi to back track on his thoughts, but instead it was jumbled and sloppy. Dashes would be more appropriate than commas in these types of sentences.)

You go on to do this for the rest of Kakashi's inner monologue like so:

"All his students had reached ANBU easily, well with some difficultly but more or less with out having to repeat it more then once."

"Naruto was driven in his need to be Hokage, Sasuke was driven in his desire to be better then his cousin and brother, and Sakura was driven to not be weak, to be the best of the best."

Soon after the initial punctuation mistakes, clumsy sentences began to appear.

"Over all they were all working slowly to their goals, but they were working hard day after day. They had gained power and strength and despite their different personalities they all had each other, which over all came back to what Kakashi was currently puzzled over." (You tend to become repetitive in your word use. I'm not asking you to consult a thesaurus, but you should keep an eye out for words that appear more then once in paragraphs. In this case "over all" and "work" were the issues.)

"Sakura was not only a top class Kunoichi and woman, but also head medic, and brilliant as always." (And woman? Many of your sentences are missing grammatical articles. This one is missing an "a". There's also a singular/plural mistake.)

"Though he wouldn't have been surprised if they had failed their first ANBU test, but none of them had and he was proud." (Run-ons are a big problem in this first chapter. You've been making them unnecessarily long. This sentence would've been better read as, " He was pleasantly surprised that they all passed the anbu test.")

The rest of the story felt like it was going nowhere. There wasn't really an indication that the story would pick up. I suppose you're subtlety setting Sakura up for a downfall (considering how you've made her character desirable) but it just doesn't come across well enough.

Sasuke's characterization is arguably ooc. Possibly in this context he would be vocal about his jealousy, but I disagree. You've written him as prideful, so why would he vocally and publicly display his jealousy? He's not that stupid.

The one thing I liked about this story was Sakura's openness about her body. It's refreshing to see a character that's comfortable in their own skin. It also makes sense for her to feel comfortable undressing around her team mates.

I skimmed the rest of the chapters to see if things would improve. I was disappointed. You've villainized many of the female characters for the sake of Sakura's. Sakura becomes just a special snowflake that we should sympathize.

I'll just leave you with this quote...

“It saddens me to see girls proudly declaring they’re not like other girls – especially when it’s 41,000 girls saying it in a chorus, never recognizing the contradiction. It’s taking a form of contempt for women – even a hatred for women – and internalizing it by saying, Yes, those girls are awful, but I’m special, I’m not like that, instead of stepping back and saying, This is a lie.

The real meaning of “I’m not like the other girls” is, I think, “I’m not the media’s image of what girls should be.” Well, very, very few of us are. Pop culture wants to tell us that we’re all shallow, backstabbing, appearance-obsessed shopaholics without a thought in our heads beyond cute boys and cuter handbags. It’s a lie – a flat-out lie – and we need to recognize it and say so instead of accepting that judgment as true for other girls, but not for you.”

- “I’m not like the other girls”, Claudia Gray

Oh... I can't wait for the sequel!

Ugh probably the ONLY story wher I hate tenten and hinati( ha! Even sPelled her name wrong!) but overall I loved it!

Ugh probably the ONLY story wher I hate tented and hinati( ha! Even s

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO! YOU CAN'T JUST ABURPTLY END IT LIKE THAT! AND IT WAS JUST GETTING GOOD!

Fine... I'll wait for the sequel...

I re-read the fic and cried over the sad parts.

Poor Lovers!

I hope there'll be a happy ending for all of them.

Like the story , but sakuras not the oldest, she's in the middle , and as far as I know younger than sasuke

Really great fic. I can't wait for the sequel but didn't sakura have another lover?

It's a very interesting story. I like it. Completely unexpected, but well written. I'm confused as to why you don't have more reviews on this story.

Couldn't stop reading, seriously! And I really, reallyyyy can't wait for the sequal!

Seriously though, how do you get ideas for your stories? They're so... Detailed, well thought out, and just so out of the ordinary that (at least I hope) it can't be from life experience or anything like that! Just impressive overall, really.

omg! i was tearing up at the end of the chapter! you made the ending so intense! Great story and I now hope that sakura does end up with Itachi because of how caring he seems and willing to have her choose if she wants to be with him or not!

upload your Sequel soon! ,

Aww! It ended already? 3 but at least they'll b a sequel ;D there r no complaits :) it was terrific n a nice twist. I seem to start thinking u like making Sakura suffer emotionally in secret or mayb it just comes off that way :) can't wait til the sequel ;D