Reviews for When You Came |
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![]() ![]() ![]() there’a nothing better than yullen. don’t let them convince you otherwise. :v |
![]() ![]() ![]() While reading the ending I was listening to farewell from the pocahontas movie lets just say it made it all the more better |
![]() ![]() Wow. Girls can be real bitches, huh? And thats comming from a girl too. Great but messed up chapture. |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was beautiful ;w; I loved it thank you so much for creating this story |
![]() ![]() Anyways, this story was amazing and it made me cry a little bit at the end. It was very well written and I love how you added in the phoenix with everything else. This is probably one of the best stories I've red on this website and when I log into my actual account, I'll be sure to fav it. |
![]() ![]() ![]() im reveiwing for all the chapters: I absolutely loved it all! when i read that allen was stabbed, i cried from saddness, then i cried more when kanda died. i cried happiness when i thought allen was alive, but then saddness when i relized he was dead. then it was back to happiness as he was now with kanda, and then happiness all the way! this is one of the- no THE best stories ive ever read! continue writing great stories like this! (w) |
![]() ![]() ![]() I love your story, silverdragon917. It is really good! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Wow! I like Kanda's wings and its colour. Lol! It's cute as it complimented Kanda's skin. Phew! Also for Allen. Yeah, I like your story, but I have something to say about it. Your scenes were repetitive. It was your writing style, I suppose. It maybe in another character's pov but still you're repeating the scenes. Perhaps, it was just me, but it really bothers me, sometimes. Because I need to skip that scene and would stop only to read a wee bit of information in that chapter/scene. Which made that chapt started to get boring. I'm not telling you to stop or change your style. Just lessen it, if possible. But still it's your choice. Just an advice from a reader. :D I'm not trying to offend you. If anything, just wanted to, I guess, help you(?). Lol! But if you were offended. I'm sorry. It was just my opinion. Don't mind me. Okay, I have to continue reading the 8 more chapt... |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm not kidding. I teared up at the flashback. I would have ran up to Kanda and hugged him and not let go. |
![]() ![]() ![]() hahahaha I love how you had Allen wear a dress! He does have quite the feminine body type. I was also sooo confused when they had kids I was like "How in the fuck did they have kids? They have an egg?..." The you stated the adoption so I was like "ohhh... XD" |
![]() ![]() ![]() To! I was like when u told about Allen chan's toture KILL. THOSE. BITCHES PLUS ALL OF THE OTHER ONES WHEN ALLEN GOT BEATEN UP AND I WAS LIKE KYAAAAAAWAII WHEN THERE IS A YULLEN FLUFF CAN'T BE BOTHERED TO CANCEL CAPSLOCK JANA |
![]() ![]() ![]() Omg! Perfect Bakanda personality so far! Same with Allen! So when is the poker game? Dark Allen ship |
![]() ![]() ![]() L. O. Lness |
![]() ![]() ![]() L. O. L |
![]() ![]() ![]() That was such an amazing story! I'm so glad that the plot stayed legit and didn't go to crazy town as some fics seem to do. This was truly wonderful to read. Thank you! |