“It destroys half her face, and Umbridge is convinced…”

You slip into present tense here.

-So, this chapter is a bit weird, and I’m kind of lost as far as the context goes. As usual, it’s satisfying to see Umbridge get punished, but, well, see my comments on the context.

Great

It's really really really really really really good hope you continue it

Good start, just spell it D-O-L-O-R-E-S. Sorry, that was irritating me.

More more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more more!

-"See page one. Now buzz off and read the chapter."

Um...if we're buzzing off, doesn't that suggest we're leaving the story. Anyway, buzzing back to review:

-"Then you will turn in a fifteen thousand word essay on what you suspect may have gone wrong," Slughorn said firmly."

Um...what?

This is nitpicking, but fifteen-thousand words would be excessive by anyone's standards, not to mention for a teenager. Heck, the longest essay I ever remember writing in uni was ten thousand words.

-Overall, I liked this chapter more than the last one. While stuff is still being dumped into Umbridge, the cauldrons are more unique to the host universe and thankfully reliant on humour that isn't related to excretement. There were a few times where it felt like the story was drifting away from Umbridge's POV, such as when Slughorn gives the essay, but good job overall.

-"Umbridge is punished for her actions at Hogwart's in an unusual manner."

Taken from the summary-"Hogwart's" needs to lose the apostrophe.

-"HPHPHPHPHPHPHPHPHPHPHPHPHPHP"

This is used to seperate sections, as far as I can tell. Nothing wrong with it in itself, but at the least, I'd recommend bolding it. Would help it stick out from the rest of the text.

-(who used her to dispose of possibly the foulest tasting potion she'd ever known.

Missing a closing bracket.

-Concerning the fic as a whole...well, I'm kind of torn. On one hand, it's potty humour. On the other, it's potty humour. On one hand, it's satisfying to see Umbridge get such punishment. On the other...well, you know...

Still, I think I ended up on the good hand by the end of it as per Filch. I could imagine him cleaning it-part of his duties, part of his respect for the old hag.

Anyway, good chapter.

I've been so busy starting work this week, I'm trying to catch up with so many fics now! I enjoyed this chapter, I love seeing Umbridge getting what she deserves, and you're really very inventive with your ideas to punish her :D

I didn't realize you had updated. I'm glad to see the next transformation. That was so interesting. Just as good as the first. Interesting explainaton about the melting part. It stems on the edge of horror, but the chapter is still enjoyable. Can't wait to see what she becomes next!

Looksl ike the evil woman is finaly getting what she decerves, only seen her movie version 9hear her book version is even worse) but really hated Dolores and thought she needed a strong punishemnt for all the BEEP she did.

Can;t wait to see the next chapter in this one yellow :D

This is so funny!

Well that is … a creative punishment. It fits though. Truly guinness (hope thats spelled right) if I may say so myself. You must update! On the edge of my seat (or bed) for more.

Great job. UPDATE!

This is the first time I read this story and I have to say that it's one of the funniest that I have ever read, finally payback against that hag is at hand lol XD.

I agree. What an awful, but creative punishment for Umbridge. I would have never thought of turning her into a toilet. It's hitting dark and nasty territory, but I'm glad you went there. Few people would. I'm just glad to see you start the challenge. I am looking forward to the next chapter. The plot is interesting as it's allowing multiple transformations for Umbridge. I kind of get the feeling of A Christmas Carol, where Scrooge is taken by the three spirits of Christmas. This is a revenge version, with Umbridge. I think the only problem with the chapter is maybe that it was written kind of sketchy. I'm not familiar with your writing style, but I think the way it's written still works. You provided description and dialogue fitting the characters. I'd suggest describing the transformation process next time in more detail. :)