It's called Khasmodan

I printed this story off a few weeks ago so I could read it more thoroughly.
I really like what you've done with the dialogue and the characterization - especially of Simon - it's been very enjoyable to read so far.
As for this chapter, I thought you did a great job with the carnival scene, so don't worry it wasn't dull at all! Bruno's and Mr. Banjo's characters were particularly funny :D

My only critique of your writing thus far is your grammar as you have some run on sentences and fragments in there as well as misspellings. For example, in Chapter 1, Act 1 you misspelled Prologue.

I'm really looking forwards to checking out more of this story in the very near future!

-greenbandit

Man I love this chapter and I really like the way you tell the story. It's very inspiring to me :)

It's been a while since I last read this fic-college can have that effect. I just want to thank you for your hard work and wonderful writing skills. This fic has brought back many memories of the Yogs and SOI. I wish you the best of luck in life! (And if you ever continue this fic I will surely come back and read it.)

this is really good

"Go now, rest and sleep. You will need it." The fans gave an honest smile
"Thank you..." O.J van der Beek said. The fans did not respond as he crossed back through his house, walking through his door to his bed. The night was mild, and he was for want of comfort as he laid down on top of his sheets. He wondered dully what would await him and what would come next. But something made him put that aside, and he fell into sleep with a smile, hoping beyond hope that by the time dawn came that all may be well.
It's been fun. It really has...Thank you for your time.

After finishing the story, I count this as one of my favorite fanfictions of all time, the story tied in perfectly with the series, even though the beginning struggled a bit.

:D
Just
:D

What? You're not continuing with this?! This is one of my favourite fanfics!

Oh well. What can you do. Thanks for creating this. It is really good. :)

Aww...this was my favorite fanfic...

I... Wow. I don't know what to say.

Thank you so much for this beautiful piece of writing. You brought Shadow of Israphel to life in so many more ways than the YouTube series did through your novelization. You took the foundations laid by the Yogscast in their series, and turned it an absolutely astounding fiction. Your writing is amazing, dialogue spectacular, and I would kill to have descriptive skills such as yours.

Thank you for such a beautiful fanfiction, friend.

Amazing as always!
I particularly like the whole Xephos memory thing you've got going on. It's certainly an interesting and unique idea. Also, the initial conversation between Xeph and Honeydew nearly broke my heart. D: You write sad/emotional scenes so well!
Anyways, keep it up! I hope we get the next chapter sometime relatively soon. :)

It's kinda weird, knowing the payoff at the end and seeing you give tiny hints that point to it. It's a clever mechanic that I've only see you do.
Course, this chapter hits hard in the chest, but you took it to the next level and gave it amazing detail (as always!) It was a symphony of emotions.
I'm curious as to what you plan to do with Xephos. You're pointing to him becoming more irritable, and I can see it growing in the next chapters. I might have a fair idea of what you plan on doing...

Nope
Nopedy nope
Nope

You wrote Peculiar's death so perfectly, how dare you ;-;

I'm so glad to see this continue (unlike my fanfics ,:) ) I loved your take on Enderman, and as always, fleshing out the interpersonal relationships and conflicts. You make it so interesting!

Also, I have to ask; are you just going to cut off when you reach the end, or have them die, or make up an ending, or what? It's fine if you don't want to give casual spoilers, but still... If you can spare a few!