I like it. Really good writing.

How some reason I can feel the sensation of being strangled. Very powerful. Or my previous experience aided it a bit too well. Who know.

Wow. Don't really know what to say to that. Nice bit of writing even if I didn't really understand why?

Where's the rest of it?

Really nice work! I'm usually more a Setsuna/Marina shipper but I think this little piece is brilliant and realistic (somehow ... I don't know why actually ... guess it's the characterization)

Keep up the great work! (I would definitely like to read more :))

There are parts when your writing is so beautiful - "the bleaching of his vision", "a haze of pleasure and pain, unsaid words and tainted feelings". I really enjoyed reading this. Nice work!