This is so perfect !
It's very well written (I'm french and I understand everything) and the idea is soooo cool !

I can't wait to know who is the accomplice ! Sadly I'm not good at all with guessing murderers etc :c
Please keep on as soon as possible, it's one of the best fics I've ever read

I've just finished the first scene and why isn't Leon taking Margaret into custody, protection or something? Isn't she at risk since she seems to know so much?
I wonder more and more about the relationship between Marie, Anna and Leon. Was Leon involved with Anna and had an affair he later regretted with Marie?
And why doesn't Leon think Marie's mother is in danger.
I have no clue who the accomplice is.
Jane is more unlikeable than Hannah because she's more vicious. They both seem confident they won't get killed but they didn't try to escape the timekeepers either when those told them to come with them or when Jane was told to come to Hannah's place. So I wouldn't bet on them but I'm not sure at all.
It could be someone close to Leon, but if we accept that it's a woman, making the accomplice Ellini would be beyond twisted.
Leon forbade Marie to contact her lawyer, Marie has no way of sending messages yet someone sent 'nice try' to leon meaning the accomplice knows to goad him. Then at the end marie did call him, so maybe I missed something...

BUT I figured out Margaret would be the victim. I feel proud of myself xD. Great plotting and characterization as usual. I'm as clueless as Leon (probably even more clueless) regarding the accomplice.

I'm very happy you updated so fast.

Yayyyy! You updated! I was so excited when I got my alert email! I went through and reread it all... It has me trying to put the pieces together to help Leon.
I look forward to the next chapter! :)

Wow, I'm so happy you updated!
This is a more intelligent fic than almost anything I've found here, especially since the style is as high-standard as the content.
Marie is a fascinating character, the flashbacks don't give us a clue that she was the culprit but are hair-rising to read since we do know she is. Leon is as wonderful and tragic as we could glimpse from the movie, and you've managed to keep him intense and brilliant despite the fact he is, for the moment, outmatched.
I love the pace you set and the mystery keeps me at the edge of my chair.

A wonderful story, truly. My greatest fear now is that you'd abandon it.

I really like the originality of this story. I read all the chapters this afternoon at work and it's very compelling! Your portrayal of Leon is highly believable. You seem to have captured that gritty, stand-alone spirit that he so poignantly portrayed in the film and enhanced it. And Marie is a terrific antagonist. I'm enjoying their dynamic.

- I look forward to see where this is going! Thanks for writing. :)

Please finish the story! IT'S AMAZING! I need to know Marie's motive!

Still reading (I'd reviewed anonymously as wide-eyed fan, some months ago).

Still top notch, you've set a brilliant pace, I can't wait to read on and I'm ashamed to say I only have flimsy ideas as to how it's going to end, so either I'm very bad at spotting clues or you're doing a good job a keeping the suspence D.

I love this, please close the case for your few enthusiastic fans.

I know its probably too late now, but would really love if you continued with this!

im ready for the next chp.

Oh wow! I've read your story up 'til now, and I just wanted to say, AWESOME! You've got me on the edge of my seat and you've done a brilliant job so far! I'm looking forwards to reading more! :D

Dun dun DUUUUN! :D Nice! I can't wait for more!

Neat, I think the dialogue between marie and leon was quite well balanced if that's what you were worried about.

Great pace, I love how the character buildup fits in with the action.

1000 years prison? Time really hardly means anymore for those in charge does it? But then when the rich guy expects to be alive in 1000 years time I guess it might not sound so absurd...

Waiting for the update!

I'm really digging this so far!

It's so annoying with In Time, because there's such a limited amount of fanfic. Oh well, more time to appreciate the ones we have!

Anyway, for the constructive criticism part: Some times, it's a bit hard to discern who's saying what, so you should probably look into that a bit.

Apart from that, great job! *thumbs up*

Looking forward to more! :D

Eerie! Marie is excellent, you have the balance struck perfectly. Please update, I would be very proud of the chapter if I had written it! I also like how Leon's facade crumbles a little in front of Marie, it makes the reader wonder about their backstory.

Eerie! Marie is excellent, you have the balance struck perfectly. Please update, I would be very proud of the chapter if I had written it! I also like how Leon's facade crumbles a little in front of Marie, it makes the reader wonder about their backstory.