The words in the wrong places and the grammar is causing a massive headache trying to read this. It’s cool but it’s also a pain to read when I have to mentally correct all the mistakes so I know what’s going on. Like when it says Zephyr is kicked but he is the one kicking it just fucks with everything and makes it a really tough read

Why did the grammar go from not bad at all to being annoying to read

Nope.

poor him

a little loose here and there but good over all.

A pathetic lying weasel who abandoned all those who supported him.

Previews for coming chapters are really stupid on sites like these. Especially for lazy bastards like this author who don’t go back and remove them after actually posting the next chapter. What is the point of a preview if you can just hit next and read the actual chapter. Kinda dumb. Retarded author.

This is really fucking retarded.

This author is a fucking retarded asshat.

This chapter was a waste of time. Useless to the story.

This is just pathetic and stupid.

Oh at least I got good sleep?
That came across as completely heartless. You really need a better editor. It’s obvious English is not your first language and you do fairly well but some of the phrasing is awkward as hell, poorly timed or just doesn’t flow well in English.

Ugh fuck you and your stupid chaos story, honesty out a fucking disclaimer about chaos story’s they suck. Like seriously it’s always so lazy with chaos story’s.

Wow the whole monsters aren’t actually evil thing is such a twisted point. Like seriously they don’t refer to them as monsters but their species branch but they are all monsters due to the facts of their being. They don’t die no monster stays dead they just reform in Tartarus and leave. Demigods kill monsters cause monsters eat them as children and never stop trying. So a big plot hole why would monsters kill children demigods if they aren’t evil.

Abandonment and betrayal story’s are so bad, like you have to make Poseidon OOC To him to abandon Percy. As for the Percy is stronger then some gods and whatnot is bs, like he never had to fight anything at their true power.