CHECK MATE
GASP! TITLE REFERENCE!

I love all the greek names! Especially since I also love Percy Jackson XP

Loved it .D
I really liked the part with Artemis and his alter egos

Haha! The ending... Loved it.

Good chapter! I kinda like Hades, to tell you the truth. But I like Arty more. And it's SO SAD that Artemis doesn't remember his fairy friends, although I like that he thinks that she's pretty :D Update soon! :)

Ummmmmmm...
the white eyed one,
Orion,
the green eyed one,
Apollo,
Daedalus,
the brown eyed one.
I think that is right...maybe.
Keep writing!

You write the best stories I've seen so far.

I really like your style and I'm enjoying the trip to that last check in the

game...that check mate.

It would be quite nice if,as the plot unravels,you use more chess analogies like

"Qween Me"s,Castles,etc.

It's always a pleasure reviewing your stories.

hey great as always :) i read road to recovery and it was great, although i think the way you have named the alternate personality's after Greek gods is better :D i have a few ideas for you (which you can completely ignore if you want) 1: have butler and Artemis have a heart to heart talk maybe after Artemis tries to rape holly (if you add that) 2: have Artemis try to commit suicide but keep him awake the whole time 3: bring No 1 into it more because he is AMAZING :P i know all of those are basically from road to recovery but they were my favorite bits and i think they would be great in your story (i know most of my suggestions make me sound like a weirdo but i kind of like the main character to be in pain(i know weird)) cant wait for the next part :D

Wow this is a great srory, and ive read quite a few. You might want to get a Beta Reader to check your stoy before it is published. PM me if you ont know what tjat is! ;-)

"Absent-mindedly, she raised a delicate finger to her lips, remembering the dying sparks of lost chances."
*whistles* That was a really nice line, I must grudgingly admit. I'm pretty jealous! :)
Is the white-eyed Artemis the one that will be most difficult to persuade?
Hmm... perhaps a new alter ego is introduced at the last moment, and helps save the day?
This is getting interesting!

very nice, please keep posting.

Ooooooooooooh. Creepy. I like Hades.

Your writing is definitely improving; I can't wait to see what comes next!

O.O
Can't wait to see what happens next...and I am quite sad for Holly...

Will wait for the next chapter!

YYYYAAAAAYYYYYYYYYYYY!YOU UPDATED!I'zes so HAPPY!

I wish this wasn't a fanfiction so you could publish it. I would have bought it!