I LOVED this story! It was just awesome. Would have liked a couple more chapters were don/the team and alan talked to sone of the men at the grave and found out some of the work charlie did. :) but otherwise GREAT STORY! !

aw god man I didnt see the phrase death fic till the end. :( Man I wish I woud have noticed that (sniff sniff sniff) that was really good but freaking sad :(

Colby was an Army ranger, not a marine. Sources: Own 4 of the 6 seasons of Numb3rs on DVD. Seen almost every episode. Please do not reply.

i like this its very moving

You really need to include a deathfic warning in summaries. I hate and do not read deathfics, and would not have read this one. I'm sorry if this has upset you, I know how important reviews are, but I am upset. I will leave you with some posative review, though. I think the idea of Charlie communicating through letters was really interesting! And while your story would benefit from a proof reader, it was really well written. I did enjoy it, right up until he died.

OMG! YOU KILLED CHARLIE!

Noooo Charlie why oh why did you have to die! (sobs)

I liked the ending. :) Very nice and touching!

:) good job.

JG

You killed him! How could you kill Charlie? -sobs- Usually people warn of a character death! This was totally unexpected and I am shocked beyond belief! This was just too sad :'C I was expecting Charlie to be severely injured or something but not DEAD! I'm seriously about to cry right now!

This was awesome! I particularly love the final chapter with all the respect the armed forces show Charlie; that was really nice to read.

I can't believe you killed him off though! When I read about it I was like "Oh well, in the next chapter we'll see that he found someone in the jeep and switched their clothes or something to throw the robbers off guard," but then I read the funeral chapter and I had to realise that you'd actually killed Charlie :O Can't you do an optional sequel or something and somehow bring him back? Say that it was an NSA cover-up?

So even though I will NEVER forgive you for killing off my favourite character (just kidding), this is a really well written fic. I would've liked a little more of Don's thoughts once he realised that his brother actually was missing, but it doesn't matter. By the way, I thought the letter-writing thing was genius - really original and insightful, especially during the first letter with the idea that it was a snapshot of Charlie's thoughts as he hovered in space moments from possible death. It really built suspense and provided a great reading experience, so thank you!

I've always known there was more to Charles Epps than he's let on, thank you so much for sharing this! And yes, I am crying...

I really liked this chapter. Keep on writing!

Amazing and awesome story! I can't wait to read more of your amazing and awesome story! Have a great and wonderful day!

Don't like the Charlie part of the story, why haven't you written it the same way as Don's? That works much better than some sort of mental letter to someone.

It's a good story apart from that.

Interesting and i hope that you will update again soon.

Looking forward to the next chapter - I want to know what happens to Charlie!

I have 2 suggestions that would make your story much better.

1. Stay in character. Charlie is an atheist; therefore, he wouldn't be praying to any God. You really need to understand the characters, like an actor would. Know who they are, inside and out, and step inside of their head, be able to react to situations in the way that they would. I believe this is even more important than the story itself.

2. Stay away from POV's. A good writer can make words flow without indicating the person's thoughts each time. Other people will be able to tell whose point of view it is, if you write it well enough.

Other than that, your story concept is interesting. Please, find a beta to look over your work and help you out, and don't stop writing!